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Nowadays the use of social media such as facebook twitter and so on is becoming more popular than one on one conversation Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages v.1

Nowadays the use of social media such as facebook twitter and so on is becoming more popular than one on one conversation Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages v. 1
Health problems caused by the excessive consumption of fast foods have assumed epidemic proportions all over the world. According to some people, it is important to impose a high tax on junk food to discourage people from eating such foods. In my opinion, this will deter only the middle and lower income groups. To begin with, imposing a higher tax will make fast foods unaffordable to poor people. This will force them to cook proper meals at home. While this might cause them some inconvenience, it is actually good for their health. However, the taxes will not discourage affluent consumers from buying fast food. They will continue to consume it. That means increasing the tax on fast food will have only a marginal effect on its consumption. Creating awareness about the ill-effects of fast foods is also unlikely to be of much help. Most people who consume fast foods are actually aware of its health consequences. For instance, a survey conducted in Singapore, one of the developed countries in the world, revealed that people are compelled to buy fast foods because of their busy schedule even though they are aware of the health problems. Perhaps a better solution is to make healthy food more affordable and accessible. One of the main reasons that increase the consumption of fast foods is that they can be cooked in a matter of minutes. Ready-to-eat foods are also available in supermarkets. Many people are consuming fast foods because healthier alternatives are not conveniently available. To conclude, increasing the tax on fast foods will only deter the low income groups from buying them. If the governments really want to reduce the consumption of fast foods, making healthier alternatives more affordable and accessible is the best solution.
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to discourage
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unaffordable to poor
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. This will force them to cook proper meals at home. While this might cause them
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inconvenience, it is actually
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. They will continue to consume it. That means increasing the
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developed countries
in the world, revealed that
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problems.

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healthy
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more affordable and accessible. One of the main reasons that increase the consumption of
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foods
is that they can
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available in supermarkets.
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, making healthier alternatives more affordable and accessible is the best solution.
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IELTS essay Nowadays the use of social media such as facebook twitter and so on is becoming more popular than one on one conversation Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
291 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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