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The tendency for human beings to follow one another is shown in the popularity of fashions in clothing and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.1

The tendency for human beings to follow one another is shown in the popularity of fashions in clothing and consumer goods. with this statement. v. 1
Of late, studying online is becoming increasingly popular. Year on year, more students are opting to study online as opposed to attending classes on campus. This essay will discuss the reasons for more online enrollments and put forward several solutions for this issue. There are primarily two causes for more students to register online - One important cause being the effectiveness of the course. This, however, has a flip side to it. Because of the medium being online, students are missing out on several aspects that a physical classroom environment facilitates. Social interaction with peers and compassion for other students in the class, is something that students lack in online learning. Another major cause for the scales to tilt towards online education is the convenience of taking courses at one’s will and time. Although, it is quite flexible for a ward to choose a course at his availability, this will hamper the student from understanding time management concepts that a traditional classroom setup offers. For instance, 78% of the students enrolled for online courses at Yale university failed to submit their coursework on time according to the Department of Foreign studies. In short, effectiveness and convenience are two main causes for the students to lean towards online courses as against to on campus learning. To address these concerns, I can think of two possible solutions. To start with, face to face interaction mode of teaching has to evolve to engage the present generation students more effectively. For that, we need to include due importance to extracurricular activities, sports and a whole lot of interactive sessions along with the academics. Needless to say, this initiative will put a lot of emphasis on the overall nourishment of the students’ thinking capabilities. In addition, a flexible credit system should be introduced in the schools, wherein, a student can opt in for the courses of his/her interest. For example, a recent study at Duke University indicated that students who have chosen their own curriculum in school fared better than those who went through online courses. Overall, including extracurricular activities and an adjustable course choice can help increase the number of on campus student admissions. To conclude, this essay portrayed the problems associated with students choosing online courses and elaborated on the causes for the same. Also, listed were the possible solutions to increase on campus registrations.
Of late, studying
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online
is becoming
increasingly
popular.
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Year on year
, more
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students
are opting to study
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online
as opposed to attending classes on
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campus
. This essay will discuss the reasons for more
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online
enrollments and put forward several solutions for this issue.

There are
primarily
two
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causes
for more
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students
to register
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online
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-
One
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important
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cause
being the effectiveness of the
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course
. This,
however
, has a flip side to it.
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Because
of the medium being
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online
,
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students
are missing out on several aspects that a physical classroom environment facilitates. Social interaction with peers and compassion for other
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students
in the
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class
, is something that
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students
lack in
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online
learning. Another major
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cause
for the scales to tilt towards
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online
education is the convenience of taking
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courses
at one’s will and time. Although, it is quite flexible for a ward to choose a
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course
at his availability, this will hamper the
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student
from understanding time management concepts that a traditional classroom setup offers.
For instance
, 78% of the
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students
enrolled for
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online
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courses
at Yale university failed to submit their coursework on time according to the Department of Foreign studies. In short, effectiveness and convenience are two main
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causes
for the
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students
to lean towards
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online
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courses
as against to on
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campus
learning.

To address these concerns, I can
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think
of two possible solutions. To
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start
with, face to face interaction mode of teaching
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has to
evolve to engage the present generation
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students
more
effectively
. For that, we need to include due importance to extracurricular activities, sports and a
Consider using "lot".
whole lot
of interactive sessions along with the academics. Needless to say, this initiative will put
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
emphasis on the
overall
nourishment of the
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students’
thinking capabilities.
In addition
, a flexible credit system should
be introduced
in the schools, wherein, a
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student
can opt in for the
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courses
of his/her interest.
For example
, a recent study at Duke University indicated that
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students
who have chosen their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
curriculum in school fared better than those who went through
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online
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courses
.
Overall
, including extracurricular activities and an adjustable
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course
choice can
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help
increase the number of on
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campus
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student
admissions.

To conclude
, this essay portrayed the problems associated with
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students
choosing
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online
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courses
and elaborated on the
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causes
for the same.
Also
, listed were the possible solutions to increase on
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campus
registrations.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The tendency for human beings to follow one another is shown in the popularity of fashions in clothing and consumer goods. with this statement. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
392 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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