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Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing ( for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening.Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, we use technology as one of our body parts. It can do almost everything. We could not think how we will be able to live life when there is no technology at all. Technology is developing every day, and now they have reached the point where the technology itself knows what people are up to by monitoring through cellphone tracking or security cameras. This essay will discuss if the advantages of this development are outweighing the disadvantages or not. Having things get more convenient through advanced technology is great because it can help reduce a lot of time. For example, if you want to search for something that has just come into your mind, you will just have to speak it out and your phone will search it for you. Another example is if your thing got stolen, there will be security footage for you to track the thief. Good things always come with bad things. This technology is seriously disturbing people's privacy. In China, there are government security cameras everywhere, on the street, in buildings, and even in your apartment. Some people did not even know that. If that person is famous, there are chances that they might be in danger if the psycho fans or paparazzi could get a hold of the leaked information. To conclude, I think the advantages and the disadvantages are balanced. If you want a more comfortable life, you will need this technology, but you will not have any privacy. If you want to keep your private life safe, then you will have to avoid using this technology.
Nowadays, we
use
technology
as one of our body parts. It can do almost everything. We could not
think
how we will be able to
live
life when there is no
technology
at all.
Technology
is developing every day, and
now
they have reached the point where the
technology
itself knows what
people
are up to by monitoring through cellphone tracking or security cameras. This essay will discuss if the advantages of this development are outweighing the disadvantages or not.

Having things
get
more convenient through advanced
technology
is great
because
it can
help
reduce
a lot of
time.
For example
, if you want to search for something that has
just
come
into your mind, you will
just
have to
speak it out and your phone will search it for you. Another example is if your thing
got
stolen, there will be security footage for you to
track
the thief.
Good
things always
come
with
bad
things. This
technology
is
seriously
disturbing
people
's privacy. In China, there are
government
security cameras everywhere, on the street, in buildings, and even in your apartment.
Some
people
did not even know that. If that person is
famous
, there are chances that they might be in
danger
if the psycho fans or paparazzi could
get
a hold of the leaked information.

To conclude
, I
think
the advantages and the disadvantages
are balanced
. If you want a more comfortable life, you will need this
technology
,
but
you will not have any privacy. If you want to
keep
your private life safe, then you will
have to
avoid using this
technology
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing ( for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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