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Nowadays, people have tend to have children in the older age.

Nowadays, people have tend to have children in the older age. KW8k9
These days, people usually have children when they are older. In my opinion, there are more advantages that disadvantages. Why? There are some reasons, why it is good to be a parent in the older years. First of all, you can live for you, you can be relaxed. Secondly, you can make your career. Thirdly, you will learn how to live and how to educate your children in the future. Finally, you will be ready for children, for example buy house or a flat to them and earn enough money to live well, because younger parents often do not plan their children. There are disadvantages too. Firstly, it will be not so easy to have children when you are about 30. Secondly, when you will die, your children will be young, they won't be very long with you. And finally, your kids can be bullied by children the same age, because of parents' age. As you can see, there are more advantages of having children in the older age than disadvantages. (171)
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in the older age than disadvantages. (171)
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IELTS essay Nowadays, people have tend to have children in the older age.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
171 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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