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Nowadays people are working too hard, what is the reason for that. what should employers do to prevent people form this. v.1

Nowadays people are working too hard, what is the reason for that. what should employers do to prevent people form this. v. 1
People have started to work hard these day's. In my opinion, there is nothing wrong with this approach of work. Since there has been an increase in competition among co-workers regarding the promotion and appraisals. These days, there is an unspoken rule about working extra hours so that an employee can show his manager that he is a hard working person and he deserves some sort of promotion. Because of this people have started to spend more than expected hours in office premises, most of them are just sitting their ideally and waiting for their bosses to see them working after hours. These people have completely devoured their personal life also. Another reason for working hard is appraisal's. This is the most important thing of an employee's life. Most of the employees are working hard just because they want a good appraisal. There is nothing bad about this sort of hard work. To stop employees exhausting themselves from work, employer's should take some serious action's. For example There can be fixed working hour's for a day, and exceeding those working hour's without a plausible cause can affect an employee's appraisal. Another thing that employer's can do is giving flexibility in work. Employer's should not give tight deadline's to employee's. Employer's can take their employee's on team lunches and dinner's where employee's can enjoy themselves. In conclusion, working hard is not a bad thing to do, but its effect on human health are dangerous. To avoid these circumstance's employer's should take care of their employee's.
People
have
started
to
work
hard
these day
's. In my opinion, there is nothing
wrong
with this approach of
work
. Since there has been an increase in competition among co-workers regarding the promotion and appraisals.

These days, there is an unspoken
rule
about
working
extra hours
so
that an employee can
show
his manager that he is a
hard
working
person and
he deserves
some
sort of promotion.
Because of this
people
have
started
to spend more than
expected
hours in office premises, most of them are
just
sitting their
ideally
and waiting for their bosses to
see
them
working
after hours. These
people
have completely devoured their personal life
also
.

Another reason for
working
hard
is appraisal's. This is the most
important
thing of an
employee's
life. Most of the employees are
working
hard
just
because
they want a
good
appraisal. There is nothing
bad
about this sort of
hard
work.

To
stop
employees exhausting themselves from
work
,
employer's
should take
some
serious action's.
For example
There can be
fixed
working
hour's for a day, and exceeding those
working
hour's without a plausible cause can affect an
employee's
appraisal. Another thing that
employer's
can do is giving flexibility in
work
.
Employer's
should not give tight deadline's to
employee's
.
Employer's
can take their
employee's
on team lunches and
dinner's
where
employee's
can enjoy themselves.

In conclusion
,
working
hard
is not a
bad
thing to do,
but
its effect on human health are
dangerous
. To avoid these
circumstance's
employer's
should take care of their
employee's
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays people are working too hard, what is the reason for that. what should employers do to prevent people form this. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
254 words
6
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