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Nowadays more people are choosing to live with friends or alone rather than with their family. This trend is likely to have a negative impact on communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In today’s fast-paced changing world, the majority of people prefer to reside with friends or lonely instead of living together with their family and this may cause to have a bad affect on society. This essay is fully acquised with the opinion is that, most of adolescents are living single or with their partners and the people who are in their family maybe miss that children in the future. Firstly, it is vitally important that many people choose to live with friends or girls in order to their parents and this can cause to destroy the relationship. Because, the parents miss their children and they need of course. If that people do not reside with their family, they will likely commit crime in the future. For instance, 63% of criminals did not live together with their family in their childhood. Secondly and more crucially, though the first education starts from the family and if the person does not live together, that person can not have a good behaviour or education. However, living alone might be dangerous in some cases. For example, if you are ill or if you have some problems, nobody can help you. Taking everything into an account, more people live alone or with their partners currently rather than their family. This movement is perhaps to have negative influence on society. The people who lived alone are dangerous as well as the behaviours are different and also they may damage to their country.
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-paced changing world, the majority of
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people
prefer to reside with friends or lonely
instead
of living together with their
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family
and this may cause to have a
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bad
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affect
on society. This essay is
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acquised
with the opinion is that,
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most of adolescents
are living single or with their partners and the
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people
who are in their
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family
maybe miss that children in the future.

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important
that
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many
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people
choose to
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live
with friends or girls in order to their parents and this can cause to
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destroy
the relationship.
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Because
, the parents miss their
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children and
they need
of course
. If that
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people
do not reside with their
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family
, they will likely commit crime in the future.
For instance
, 63% of criminals did not
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live
together with their
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family
in their childhood.

Secondly
and more
crucially
, though the
first
education
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starts
from the
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family
and if the person does not
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live
together, that person can not have a
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good
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behaviour
or education.
However
, living alone might be
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in
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cases.
For example
, if you are ill or if you have
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some
problems, nobody can
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help
you.

Taking everything into an account, more
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people
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live
alone or with their partners
currently
rather
than their
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family
. This movement is perhaps to have
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negative
influence on society. The
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people
who
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lived
alone are
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dangerous
as well
as the
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behaviours
are
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different
and
also
they may damage to their country.
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IELTS essay Nowadays more people are choosing to live with friends or alone rather than with their family. This trend is likely to have a negative impact on communities. with this opinion?

Essay
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245 words
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