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Nowadays more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do you think the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh its disadvantages for the environment? v.2

Nowadays more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do you think the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh its disadvantages for the environment? v. 2
The debate about the impact of vehicles on the environment has been on for a while. Recently, quite a number of people now purchase and drive their personal cars. This essay will look at the positives for private car owners, as well as the negatives on the environment; although, I think the advantages of the growing number of car users far outweigh the negative impact on the surroundings. One of the advantages is the convenience a privately-owned car avail to its owner. More and more people now want to avoid the stress of taking public transport every now and then. Moreover, owning your own car will also get you to your destination a lot faster than public transport, which tend to waste time by having to stop at every interval. For instance, driving from Ikeja to Yaba will last fifteen minutes, whereas, it takes about double that time when commuting on a public vehicle. To summarize, individuals will opt for a more convenient means of getting to their destination, and more preferably, if it gets them there faster. On the other hand, the increase in vehicular movements on the road poses a great threat to the surroundings in terms of air contamination and noise abuse. The more cars on the road, the more the around us is polluted. This is because, most cars run by burning petrol or diesel, which emit harmful substances into the atmosphere. Furthermore, noise pollution is caused by the blaring of honks indiscriminately, which occurs as a result of more and more people using the road. For example, in Lagos over 3 million cars ply the roads daily. The effect of this is the over-bearing amount of noise and air pollution experienced in the city. To conclude, this essay has weighed the positives of many people driving their cars in terms of convenience, and the negative effect on the environment in terms of pollution on the environment. I think the positives outnumber the disadvantages to the environment.
The debate about the impact of vehicles on the
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environment
has been on for a while. Recently, quite a number of
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people
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now
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purchase
and drive their personal
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cars
. This essay will look at the positives for private
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car
owners,
as well
as the negatives on the
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environment
; although, I
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think
the advantages of the growing number of
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car
users far outweigh the
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negative
impact on the surroundings.

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privately
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owned
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car
avail to its owner. More and more
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people
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now
want to avoid the
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stress
of taking public transport every
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now
and then.
Moreover
, owning your
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own
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car
will
also
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get
you to your destination a lot faster than public transport, which tend to waste time by having to
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stop
at every interval.
For instance
, driving from
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Ikeja
to
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Yaba
will last fifteen minutes, whereas, it takes about double that time when commuting on a public vehicle.
To summarize
, individuals will opt for a more convenient means of getting to their destination, and more
preferably
, if it
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gets
them there faster.

On the other hand
, the increase in vehicular movements on the
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road
poses a great threat to the surroundings in terms of air contamination and noise abuse. The more
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cars
on the
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road
, the more the around us
is polluted
. This is
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because
, most
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cars
run by burning petrol or diesel, which emit harmful substances into the atmosphere.
Furthermore
, noise pollution
is caused
by the blaring of honks
indiscriminately
, which occurs
as a result
of more and more
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people
using the
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road
.
For example
, in Lagos over 3 million
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cars
ply
the
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roads
daily. The effect of this is the over-bearing amount of noise and air pollution experienced in the city.

To conclude
, this essay has weighed the positives of
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many
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people
driving their
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cars
in terms of convenience, and the
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negative
effect on the
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environment
in terms of pollution on the
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environment
. I
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think
the positives outnumber the disadvantages to the
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environment
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do you think the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh its disadvantages for the environment? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 8.5
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