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Nowadays more and more older people who are looking for work have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions? v.5

Nowadays more and more older people who are looking for work have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions? v. 5
The job market is a competitive world altogether. With the increase in the cost of living, older people have to work after their retirement, eventually, the main challenge for them is the competition with the younger workforce for the same job. While this can create problems, there are steps that can be taken to reduce the impacts. One of the first challenges for the senior population is to grab a job that arises from the fact that they lack knowledge of software and programs that are profusely used in the present work domain. For example, information technology is one such requirement in today’s digital world. Youngsters have profound and up-to-date knowledge and expertise in this sector, merely due to their college degrees, while aged people sometimes struggle to learn even the basics. Another major concern is receding performance due to longer working hours. Most of the senior citizens are prone to fatigue and generally cannot work for longer intervals. While some companies encourage extra working hours, it is difficult for the elderly to keep up the enthusiasm for consecutive tiring days at work. However, it is important that the government should take some preventive measures to mitigate the effects. The government could furnish free training programs for older people in the most prevalent career courses required to secure a job. This can be done in public libraries or community centers which are easily accessible by older members. In addition, adequate legislation and control on working hours should be ensured by administration by denigrating the company which deliberately supports the culture of late working hours. In conclusion, sometimes aged people have to work to support their family financially. While outdated work experience is a major setback, continuous learning through government free skill-building program can elevate their chances to beat the younger competition.
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market is a competitive world altogether. With the increase in the cost of living, older
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people
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have to
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work
after their retirement,
eventually
, the main challenge for them is the competition with the younger workforce for the same
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job
. While this can create problems, there are steps that can
be taken
to
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reduce
the impacts.

One of the
first
challenges for the senior population is to grab a
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job
that arises from the fact that they lack knowledge of software and programs that are
profusely
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used
in the present
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work
domain.
For example
, information technology is one such requirement in
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today
’s digital world. Youngsters have profound and up-to-date knowledge and expertise in this sector,
merely
due to their college degrees, while aged
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people
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sometimes
struggle to learn even the basics. Another major concern is receding performance due to longer
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working
hours. Most of the senior citizens are prone to fatigue and
generally
cannot
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work
for longer intervals. While
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some
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companies
encourage extra
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working
hours, it is difficult for the elderly to
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keep
up the enthusiasm for consecutive tiring days at work.

However
, it is
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important
that the
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government
should take
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some
preventive measures to mitigate the effects. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
could furnish free training programs for older
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people
in the most prevalent career courses required to secure a
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job
. This can
be done
in public libraries or community centers which are
easily
accessible by older members.
In addition
, adequate legislation and control on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
hours should
be ensured
by administration by denigrating the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
which
deliberately
supports the culture of late
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working
hours.

In conclusion
,
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sometimes
aged
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people
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have to
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work
to support their family
financially
. While outdated
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work
experience is a major setback, continuous learning through
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
free
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
-building program can elevate their chances to beat the younger competition.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays more and more older people who are looking for work have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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