Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Nowadays more and more older people, who are looking for work, compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions?

It is considered that currently growing competition in a workplace is prevalent between young and old employees. This essay will focus on the main reasons of this issue comprising of high unemployment rates and technological illiteracy of adults, which can be tackled by providing better job prospects and training courses. To begin with, increased work competition amongst both young and old generations accounted for an upward trend in the joblessness of people. Since the working population will face with the risk of redundancy if the workplace restructures, downsizes or outsources its workforce, employees are more willing to preserve their job position by contesting with others. For example, the majority of people in India is redundant. One of the feasible solutions to this problem is to encourage greater job opportunities. If the government subsidized on ensuring more job places, there would like to be low rates of unemployment. Secondly, due to the technological advancement more jobs are becoming technology-focused, therefore employers find out younger generation more well-qualified and knowledgeable in comparison with old groups. For instance, the recent research indicated that there might be more automation of jobs. However, the competitiveness will arise further because adults believe that traditional methods will not be replaced. The measure to take is that authorities can offer ongoing trainings to old workers in order to boost their technological literacy. This results in enhancing career progression and performance of adults at work environment. To sum up, the problem of high work competition of old and young generations because of substantial unemployment proportion and lack of knowledge of adults about modern technology could be solved by suppling workers with better job prospects and teaching old employees how to apply electronic devices.
It
is considered
that
currently
growing competition in a workplace is prevalent between young and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
employees. This essay will focus on the main reasons of this issue
Did you mean "comprising" or "consisting of"?
comprising of
high unemployment rates and technological illiteracy of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
adults
, which can
be tackled
by providing better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
prospects and training courses.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, increased work competition amongst both young and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
generations accounted for an upward trend in the joblessness of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. Since the working population will face with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of redundancy if the workplace restructures, downsizes or outsources its workforce, employees are more willing to preserve their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
position by contesting with others.
For example
, the majority of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in India is redundant. One of the feasible solutions to this problem is to encourage greater
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
opportunities. If the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
subsidized on ensuring more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
places, there would like to be low rates of unemployment.

Secondly
, due to the technological advancement more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
are becoming technology-focused,
therefore
employers find out younger generation more well-qualified and knowledgeable
in comparison
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
groups.
For instance
, the recent research indicated that there might be more automation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
.
However
, the competitiveness will arise
further
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
adults
believe that traditional methods will not
be replaced
. The measure to take is that authorities can offer ongoing trainings to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
workers in order to boost their technological literacy. This results in enhancing career progression and performance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
adults
at work environment.

To sum up, the problem of high work competition of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
and young generations
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of substantial unemployment proportion and lack of knowledge of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
adults
about modern technology could
be solved
by
Possible spelling mistake found.
suppling
workers with better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
prospects and teaching
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
employees how to apply electronic devices.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Nowadays more and more older people, who are looking for work, compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts