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Nowadays, many people have to work longer time, and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their life easier?

Nowadays, many people have to work longer time, and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their life easier? YLB2Q
It has been observed, number of employees stay for long hours at their work premises in account to complete their work. As a result of this, they all are suffering from stress. There are variety of causes are responsible that enhance the amount of stress and tension likewise time deadline, for the sake of getting promotion and bonus and definitely for to attain security to get fix at work place. All these causes explain one by one in up-coming paragraphs also describe some effective measures that should be implemented by office authority. Admittedly, a person spends half span from his life at work premises. But now the trend of long working hours is increasing. The first leading cause is to put pressure to meet deadline. To finish task at right time a person needed to work for long hours even without take a break. Here a quote is perfectly suitable that all work makes a jack in dull similarly always put down head in work gives birth to stress. Secondly, regardless to get salary a person works without time limit to attain promotion and bonus that he want to have to spend lavishly on their family. Moreover, the job security is another Concern reason for stress. As every day, the hundreds of job seekers visit to find job and to hire a new one employer always put pressure to their old employee to work more and more. In this way, a person fell into depression and helplessly to work for long hours. Apart from these, the another reason connect with to set an impression on boss in other words, to get favour from their boss a person stay at office and work beyond their time limit. To eliminate these problems of stress at workstation, an employer should take effective steps that feel to their employees comfortable and convenient. First-of-all, the most viable solution of this, the company should regulate their working hours for an example the famous Tata steel company does not allow to their employees to work more than 48 hours in a week. In this way every workers has time to rest as well as spend quality time with their family and to get rejuvenate for next productive week. Additionally, an employer should develop friendly atmosphere at work because this type of atmosphere is beneficial to discuss their issues and disputes which anyone that he or she has. Nevertheless to say, provide counselling at office premises at right time can stop the problem of stress and play vital role to improve the mental condition of an employee. To conclude, workplace is regarded as second place to a worker due to spend large part from his life at work. Therefore, it is the primary duty of an employer to make and maintain healthy atmosphere where employees work with joy and fun.
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been observed
, number of
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employees
stay for
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long
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hours
at their
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work
premises in account to complete their
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work
.
As a result
of this, they all are suffering from
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stress
. There are variety of causes are responsible that enhance the amount of
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stress
and tension
likewise
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time
deadline, for the sake of getting promotion and bonus and definitely for to attain security to
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get
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fix
at
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work
place. All these causes
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explain
one by one in up-coming paragraphs
also
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describe
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some
effective measures that should
be implemented
by office authority.

Admittedly
, a
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person
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spends
half span from his life at
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work
premises.
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But
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now
the trend of
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long
working
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hours
is increasing. The
first
leading cause is to put pressure to
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meet
deadline. To finish task at right
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time
a
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person
needed to
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work
for
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long
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hours
even without take a break. Here a quote is
perfectly
suitable that all
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work
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makes
a jack in dull
similarly
always put down head in
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work
gives birth to
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stress
.
Secondly
, regardless to
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get
salary a
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person
works without
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time
limit to attain promotion and bonus that he want to
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have to
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spend
lavishly
on their family.

Moreover
, the job security is another Concern reason for
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stress
. As every day, the hundreds of job seekers visit to find job and to hire a new one
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employer
always put pressure to their
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old
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employee
to
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work
more and more. In this way, a
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person
fell into depression and
helplessly
to
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work
for
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long
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hours
. Apart from these, the another reason connect with to set an impression on boss
in other words
, to
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get
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favour
from their boss a
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person
stay at office and
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work
beyond their
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time
limit.

To eliminate these problems of
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stress
at workstation, an
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employer
should take effective steps that feel to their
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employees
comfortable and convenient.
First
-of-all, the most viable solution of this, the
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company
should regulate their working
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hours
for an example the
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famous
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Tata steel
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company
does not
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allow
to their
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employees
to
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work
more than 48
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hours
in a week. In this way every
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workers
has
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time
to rest
as well
as
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spend
quality
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time
with their family and to
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get
rejuvenate for
next
productive week.

Additionally
, an
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employer
should develop friendly atmosphere at
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work
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because
this type of atmosphere is beneficial to discuss their issues and disputes which anyone that he or she has.
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Nevertheless
to say, provide counselling at office premises at right
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time
can
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stop
the problem of
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stress
and play vital role to
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improve
the mental condition of an employee.

To conclude
, workplace
is regarded
as second place to a worker due to
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spend
large part from his life at
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work
.
Therefore
, it is the primary duty of an
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employer
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
and maintain healthy atmosphere where
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employees
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work
with joy and fun.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, many people have to work longer time, and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their life easier?

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
472 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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