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Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

These days, self-employment has become an option for an increasing number of people who prefer to work for themselves rather than being employed in an organisation. Several reasons contribute to this phenomenon, and there are some drawbacks of being self-employed too, which will be discussed in this essay. In today's world, many people tend to start up their own business for various reasons. First, some people have many work ideas and dreams in mind that they cannot implement as long as they work for a company or another person. When these people start their business, away from the law and regulations imposed on companies, they can fulfil their long life ambition. As a result, they will be accessible by a flexible work timetable and freedom of action and self-confidence. Masaru Ibuka, for example, quit his job and by launching his business, the Sony Corporation, he created a dramatic change in the world. Second, some individuals prefer to work from home and have a job because of their enormous family responsibilities. Thanks to the Internet and technology, this is possible, and these people can manage their lives better via holding their own business. However, like everything else on the earth, self-employment suffers from shortcomings. Undoubtedly, beginning any business has its own challenges. People who have started their own business might encounter budgetary troubles and in many cases will not have government financial support or cannot loan from a bank. Therefore, their work will fail, and they will go bankrupt. Moreover, self-employment will have an uncertain income. In truth, if the income is low, the person spends more time and energy to achieve a more reasonable income, which causes fatigue and sometimes frustration in the person. In conclusion, the need for liberty makes people want to follow the path of self-employment, but it can have its drawbacks because it implies an unpredictable salary, more working hours, and bankruptcy.
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drawbacks of being self-employed too, which will
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and dreams in mind that they cannot implement as long as they
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company
or another person. When these
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people
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their
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, away from the law and regulations imposed on
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companies
, they can fulfil their long life ambition.
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, they will be accessible by a flexible
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work
timetable and freedom of action and self-confidence.
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Masaru
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,
for example
, quit his job and by launching his
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business
, the Sony Corporation, he created a dramatic
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change
in the world. Second,
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some
individuals prefer to
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work
from home and have a job
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because
of their enormous family responsibilities. Thanks to the Internet and technology, this is possible, and these
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people
can manage their
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lives
better via holding their
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own
business.

However
, like everything else on the earth, self-employment suffers from shortcomings.
Undoubtedly
, beginning any
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business
has its
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own
challenges.
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who have
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started
their
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own
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business
might encounter budgetary troubles and in
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cases will not have
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government
financial support or cannot loan from a bank.
Therefore
, their
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work
will fail, and they will go bankrupt.
Moreover
, self-employment will have an uncertain income. In truth, if the income is low, the person spends more time and energy to achieve a more reasonable income, which causes fatigue and
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frustration in the person.

In conclusion
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makes
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people
want to follow the path of self-employment,
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it can have its drawbacks
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because
it implies an unpredictable salary, more working hours, and bankruptcy.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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