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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. 8eRw
Nowadays, many people prefer to be self-employed rather than find a job in a company or organisation. There are many reasons for this situation in the world. Firstly, people can do the work they are interested in by being self-employed. It means that they are able to find their real interests and make them become their jobs. These jobs not only bring people wealth, but also help them to enjoy their lives, rather than get income from boring work. In addition, people can decide the time when they want to work. They do not need to obey a limited timetable of the company and can make full use of the whole day. Also, if sometimes they have some trouble, like getting sick, they have enough spare time to use. Furthermore, being self-employed gives people the chance to achieve their goals. For example, there are energetic people having the ability to do innovation. So they choose to be self-employed and make some practical actions in different ways, such as creating a new business company or doing some scientific research. On the other hand, being self-employed also contains several disadvantages. For instance, people face much larger risks compared to common works. They can not ensure their monthly basic income which will influence the quality of their lives. Moreover, people may lose their confidence when they fail to be self-employed. Because of the failure, someone chooses to end their lives and this will result in bad effects on our communities. Overall, although we can gain many benefits which normal work can not provide through being self-employed, we should realize that it also exists in a series of uncertain factors. So, it is very important for everyone to make this decision by considering carefully.
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,
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people
can do the
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work
they
are interested
in by being self-employed. It means that they are able to find their real interests and
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make
them become their jobs. These jobs not
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only
bring
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people
wealth,
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also
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help
them to enjoy their
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lives
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than
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get
income from boring
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work
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people
can decide the time when they want to
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work
. They do not need to obey a limited timetable of the
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company
and can
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make
full
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use
of the whole day.
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trouble, like getting sick, they have
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enough
spare time to
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use
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Furthermore
, being self-employed gives
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people
the chance to achieve their goals.
For example
, there are energetic
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people
having the ability to do innovation.
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So
they choose to be self-employed and
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make
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some
practical actions in
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different
ways, such as creating a new business
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company
or doing
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some
scientific research.

On the other hand
, being self-employed
also
contains several disadvantages.
For instance
,
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people
face much larger
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compared to common works. They can not ensure their monthly basic income which will influence the quality of their
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lives
.
Moreover
,
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people
may lose their confidence when they fail to be self-employed.
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Because
of the failure, someone chooses to
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end
their
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lives
and this will result in
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bad
effects on our communities.

Overall
, although we can gain
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many
benefits which normal
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work
can not provide through being self-employed, we should realize that it
also
exists in a series of uncertain factors.
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, it is
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for everyone to
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make
this decision by considering
carefully
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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