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Nowadays larger distance are travelled by people to work and study on a daily basis. Some consider it to be a negative development while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.2

Nowadays larger distance are travelled by people to work and study on a daily basis. Some consider it to be a negative development while others disagree. 2
Is it bad to commute to distant places, interact with a wider range of people of different neighbouring towns and cities? If people earn a position or career opportunity in an institution which is a bit far from their homes, or if they opt to make long journeys to learn better skills and in search of a better study or work environment, how can it be a negative development? In this essay, I will show you that travelling larger distances everyday by people to work and study has a significant positive effect on one's mental and career growth and knowledge and especially helps in achieving challenging goals. Firstly, travelling long distances for a good career better environment broadens one's horizon of knowledge and significantly enriches personal learning experience. Most of the times, a big school or company offering better quality education and higher position, are not located within a close vicinity. These kind of institutions are comparatively less in number. For instance, prestigious Universities like Oxford and Cambridge provide excellent education and it is quite natural that students from far and wide places will flock here to get a quality education and degree. It is very foolish to let go such a lucrative opportunity of studying in such top ranking Universities just because a person might have to travel far from their homes. Above all, by travelling greater distances people also do get an opportunity to interact with people outside their hometowns, cities and local area. When a person travels over 30-50 kms every day, not only can he meet the locals of neighbouring towns and locality, but also commute with them in the same bus or train, talk to them and get to know them and their culture. Also, in the workplace and school, a person can interact and make friends with people coming from far off places. As a result, there is more exposure and a chance to mix with a wide variety of populations. This healthy interaction breaks many stereotypes and makes a person humble. It is hard to imagine a life spent in a small area among a small circle of people. Moreover, some of the most developed places are those where people from far off places commute for their career. For example, people from different parts of the UK come to London to work, some commute daily from neighbouring towns like Brighton or Surrey, while others have migrated from distant cities like Edinburgh and Manchester. London provides a multicultural environment which brings people of different culture, ages, race together under a single roof and clearly London is the most developed cities in the UK and Europe. Travelling long distances has a notable positive impact on the progress of people and a country as a whole. With modern advancements in technologies, faster and advanced modes of transport are available everywhere, which helps to cover long distances within a short span of time. Subways, trains, bullet trains, buses, monorails have made life and commuting much easier, comfortable and quicker. For instance, London is connected by an extensive network of subway which links distant parts of the city and passengers can cover several kilometres comfortably within few minutes. Travelling is not a big hassle and time consuming like it used to be in the past. Finally, to conclude, I strongly disagree that travelling larger distances for work or studies by people nowadays have any kind of negative impact. On the contrary, this is a positive development which has proved beneficial in different ways. People get a wide exposure, can break their shyness and make friends from far and wide, be flexible and grab advanced positions and get admitted in excellent educational institutions and enjoy the advantages of and be a part of a developed society.
Is it
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bad
to commute to distant
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places
, interact with a wider range of
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people
of
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different
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neighbouring
towns and
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cities
? If
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people
earn a position or
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career
opportunity in an institution which is a bit
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far
from their homes, or if they opt to
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make
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long
journeys to learn
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better
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skills
and in search of a
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better
study or
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work
environment, how can it be a
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negative
development? In this essay, I will
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show
you that
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travelling
larger
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distances
everyday by
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people
to
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work
and study has a significant
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positive
effect on one's mental and
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career
growth and knowledge and
especially
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helps
in achieving challenging goals.

Firstly
,
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travelling
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long
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distances
for a
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good
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career
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better
environment broadens one's horizon of knowledge and
significantly
enriches personal learning experience.
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Most of the times
, a
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big
school or
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company
offering
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better
quality education and higher position, are not located within a close vicinity.
Did you mean "this kind" or "These kinds"?
These kind
of institutions are
comparatively
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less in number
.
For instance
, prestigious Universities like Oxford and Cambridge provide excellent education and it is quite natural that students from
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far
and
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wide
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places
will flock here to
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get
a quality education and degree. It is
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very
foolish to
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let
go such a lucrative opportunity of studying in such top ranking Universities
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just
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because
a
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person
might
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have to
travel
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far
from their homes.

Above all
, by
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travelling
greater
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distances
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people
also
do
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get
an opportunity to interact with
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people
outside their hometowns,
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cities
and local area. When a
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person
travels over 30-50
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kms
every day, not
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only
can he
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meet
the locals of
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neighbouring
towns and locality,
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but
also
commute with them in the same bus or train, talk to them and
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get
to know them and their culture.
Also
, in the workplace and school, a
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person
can interact and
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make
friends with
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people
coming from
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far
off
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places
.
As a result
, there is more exposure and a chance to mix with a
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wide
variety of populations. This healthy interaction breaks
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many
stereotypes and
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makes
a
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person
humble. It is
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hard
to imagine a life spent in a
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small
area among a
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small
circle of
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people
.

Moreover
,
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some
of the most developed
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places
are those where
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people
from
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far
off
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places
commute for their
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career
.
For example
,
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people
from
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different
parts of the UK
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come
to London to
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work
,
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some
commute daily from
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neighbouring
towns like Brighton or Surrey, while others have migrated from distant
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cities
like Edinburgh and Manchester. London provides a multicultural environment which brings
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people
of
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different
culture, ages, race together under a single roof and
clearly
London is the most developed
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cities
in the UK and Europe.
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Travelling
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long
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distances
has a notable
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positive
impact on the progress of
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people
and a country as a whole.

With modern advancements in technologies, faster and advanced modes of transport are available everywhere, which
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helps
to cover
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long
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distances
within a short span of time. Subways, trains, bullet trains, buses, monorails have made life and commuting much easier, comfortable and quicker.
For instance
, London
is connected
by an extensive network of subway which links distant parts of the city and passengers can cover several
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kilometres
comfortably
within few minutes.
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is not a
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big
hassle and
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time consuming
like it
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used
to be in the past.

Finally
,
to conclude
, I
strongly
disagree that
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travelling
larger
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distances
for
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work
or studies by
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people
nowadays have any kind of
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negative
impact.
On the contrary
, this is a
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positive
development which has proved beneficial in
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different
ways.
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People
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get
a
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wide
exposure, can break their shyness and
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make
friends from
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far
and
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wide
, be flexible and grab advanced positions and
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get
admitted in excellent educational institutions and enjoy the advantages of and be a part of a developed society.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
71Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays larger distance are travelled by people to work and study on a daily basis. Some consider it to be a negative development while others disagree. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
627 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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