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Nowadays, in many countries, young people do not stay with their parents. Instead , they move to another place to work or study. In your opinion, is this a positive or negative trend?

Nowadays, in many countries, young people do not stay with their parents. Instead, they move to another place to work or study. In your opinion, is this a positive or negative trend? 16aL

In this day and age, in order to operate in this dog-eat-dog world, people’s lifestyles, living patterns, and family bonding have been changed enormously. Resultantly, adolescents, in recent years, are leaving their birthplace and parents so as to get better opportunities in the field of study or job markets, has come along with a number of upsides, together with downsides. However, I deem that moving to another place for doing well in life is more of a blessing on the grounds that it helps them become independent at an early age and know about the real nature of the world. Living in another city or country apart from the guardians teaches young people to lead their life independently. To be more precise, in many cases, juveniles have to make their own decisions, manage money and so on in an unknown place, leading them to be more mature. To cite an example, an empirical study conducted by Cambridge University reveals that 99% of international students do part-time jobs to manage the fund for tuition fees, whereas those students did not have any tension at the school and college level, which costs were borne by their parents. To stay in a small on underprivileged city never provides students with edge-of-the-seat learning and working ambience. To be specific, only living and working in a larger city or developed country helps students to know the real demand of the cutthroat world. If youth had to stay with their parents without thinking about their career opportunities, it would next to impossible to cope with other competitors. To exemplify, 89% of village students in Bangladesh do not get a job in a multinational company down to not having any up-to-date knowledge about the corporate world. Hence, it has turned out to incumbent on adolescents to leave their comfort zones and move for better chances. In essence, to migrate to another city or country indubitably results in many edges including becoming dependable and capable much as youngsters have to leave their parents. Therefore, from my viewpoint, the negative trends, if there is any, are far outweighed by positive sides.

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people
’s lifestyles, living patterns, and family bonding have been This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteredadjusted
changed
enormously
. Resultantly
, adolescents, in recent years, are leaving their birthplace and parents 'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"to
so as to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 better opportunities in the field of study or job markets, has This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 along with a number of upsides, together with downsides. However
, I deem that moving to another place for doing well in life is more of a blessing on the grounds that it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assists
helps
 them become independent at an early age and know about the real nature of the world.

Living in another city or country apart from the guardians teaches young This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 to lead their life independently
. To be more precise, in This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 cases, juveniles This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 decisions, manage money and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 on in an unknown place, leading them to be more mature. To cite an example, an empirical study conducted by Cambridge University reveals that 99% of international You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 do part-time jobs to manage the fund for tuition fees, whereas those You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 did not have any tension at the school and college level, which costs were borne
 by their parents.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
To
 stay in a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 on underprivileged city never provides You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 with edge-of-the-seat learning and working ambience. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
To
 be specific, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 living and working in a larger city or This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :developed nationcountry with a strong economyindustrialized nation
developed country
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assists
helps
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 to know the real demand of the cutthroat world. If youth had to stay with their parents without thinking about their career opportunities, it would next
 to impossible to cope with other competitors. To exemplify, 89% of village You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 in Bangladesh do not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 a job in a multinational This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 down to not having any up-to-date knowledge about the corporate world. Hence
, it has turned out to incumbent on adolescents to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :depart
leave
 their comfort zones and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocate
move
 for better chances.

In essence, to migrate to another city or country indubitably
 results in This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 edges including becoming dependable and capable much as youngsters This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :depart
leave
 their parents. Therefore
, from my viewpoint, the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
 trends, if there is any, are far outweighed by This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
positive
 sides. 