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Nowadays, consumers tend to buy more processed / pre-cooked food. Some people believe that this change improved the way people live. To what extent do you agree / disagree?

Nowadays, consumers tend to buy more processed / pre-cooked food. Some people believe that this change improved the way people live. VQBrD
With the considerable convenience of processed foods,  it is going to become more prevalent and whether processed foods will bring positive or negative impacts to our lives has drawn much discussion among the general public. While I accept that pre-cooked foods could have some advantages, I would argue that it still has drawbacks in modern life. On the one hand, this convennience of processed foods could be seen as a postive trend in some cases. To illustrate, convenience foods can offer a wide range of benefits such as shortening the time of meal preparation and easily cleaning up as these types of foods are designed to be eaten immediately after basically adding boiled water, heating or thawing. Moreover, processed foods are regarded as packaged products which have already seasoned with suitable ingredients, including sugar and trans-fat, with trans-fat is the main factor that contributing to maintain the flavour of food. Thus, most of convenience foods play a pivotal role in the hectic schedules people have these days On the other hand, in spite of aforementioned advantages, health and environmental problems can be the main disadvantages of convenience foods. Consumers can have potential ailments such as obesity and diabetes or even cancers because of harmful ingredients within processed foods. The evidence of this can be found in individuals with a healthy overall well-being as they have a tendency to opt for organic and home-cooked dishes instead of pre-cooked foods. Additionally, convenience foods is one of the factors that leading to global warming and ozone depletion, due to the industrial manufactoring processes and a huge amount of waste In conclusion, despite the arguments for the negative impacts of processed foods to physical well-being, I believe that it could also bring some merits to human race
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foods
,
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it is going to become more prevalent and whether
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processed
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foods
will bring
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positive
or
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negative
impacts to our
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lives
has drawn much discussion among the
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general public
. While I accept that
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pre-cooked
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foods
could have
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some
advantages, I would argue that it
still
has drawbacks in modern life.

On the one hand, this
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convennience
of
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processed
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could be
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seen
as a
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postive
trend in
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some
cases. To illustrate,
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convenience
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foods
can offer a wide range of benefits such as shortening the time of meal preparation and
easily
cleaning up as these types of
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foods
are designed
to
be eaten
immediately after 
basically
adding boiled water, heating or thawing.
Moreover
,
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processed
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foods
are regarded
as packaged products which have already seasoned with suitable ingredients, including sugar and trans-
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fat
, with trans-
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fat
is the main factor that contributing to maintain the
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flavour
of
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food
.
Thus
, most of
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convenience
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foods
play a pivotal role in the hectic schedules
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people
have these days

On the other hand
,
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in spite of
aforementioned advantages, health and environmental problems can be the main disadvantages of
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convenience
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foods
. Consumers can have potential ailments such as obesity and diabetes or even cancers
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because
of harmful ingredients within
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processed
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foods
. The evidence of this can
be found
in individuals with a healthy
overall
well-being as they have a tendency to opt for organic and home-cooked dishes
instead
of
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pre-cooked
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foods
.
Additionally
,
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convenience
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foods
is one of the factors that leading to global warming and ozone depletion, due to the industrial
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manufactoring
processes and a huge amount of waste

In conclusion
, despite the arguments for the
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negative
impacts of
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processed
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foods
to physical well-being, I believe that it could
also
bring
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some
merits to human race
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IELTS essay Nowadays, consumers tend to buy more processed / pre-cooked food. Some people believe that this change improved the way people live.

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