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In many countries, plastic shopping bgs are the main type of rubbish. They cause water pollution and land pollution, so they should be banned. To what extend do you agree? v.1

In many countries, plastic shopping bgs are the main type of rubbish. They cause water pollution and land pollution, so they should be banned. v. 1
Companies and organisations are forced to their employees to wear homogeneous of their company which is the symbol of identity. To what extent it is important for employer and employee is a most debatable topic around the world. This essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages and it will lead to a logical conclusion. First of all, a uniform is a code and everyone feels equal and comfortable in the dress and it leads to profitable situation in the company. Dress prescribes uniform at work and more formal to look at, in this way clients will treat them with more respect. There are many jobs where uniform is very necessary and present their country's symbol of identity, for example, national forces Army, Navy, Air forces. On the other side of the argument, there are some disadvantages. First of all, it id very difficult for employees to wear the same dress every day and each one gets board from it want to try something new to feel fresh, feeling affects their performance at work. Secondly, someone may have specific allergy from some kind for clothing material so they have to wear it everyday ultimately he or she work partially hurt which will lead to cuts in production, for example, some people have allergy from synthetic material most of the dresses are made from that type of cloth. In conclusion, we can say that uniform is necessary in some trade and national force jobs, but to some extant wearing uniform also have disadvantages.
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Companies
and
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organisations
are forced
to their employees to wear homogeneous of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
which is the symbol of identity. To what extent it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
for employer and employee is a most debatable topic around the world. This essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages and it will lead to a logical conclusion.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniform
is a code and everyone feels equal and comfortable in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dress
and it leads to profitable situation in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Dress
prescribes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniform
at work and more formal to look at, in this way clients will treat them with more respect. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
jobs where
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
uniform
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
necessary and present their country's symbol of identity,
for example
, national forces Army, Navy, Air forces.

On the other side of the argument, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
disadvantages.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
Do not use a noun immediately after the pronoun 'it'. Use a verb or an adverb, or possibly some other part of speech.
it id
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
difficult for employees to wear the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dress
every day and each one
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
board from it want to try something new to feel fresh, feeling affects their performance at work.
Secondly
, someone may have specific allergy from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
kind for clothing material
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they
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have to
wear it
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
ultimately
he or she work
partially
hurt which will lead to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cuts
in production,
for example
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have allergy from synthetic material most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dresses
are made
from that type of cloth.

In conclusion
, we can say that
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uniform
is necessary in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
trade and national force jobs,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
to
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some
extant wearing
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uniform
also
have disadvantages.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries, plastic shopping bgs are the main type of rubbish. They cause water pollution and land pollution, so they should be banned. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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