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Nowadays, anyone can post information on the internet even if it is incorrect. As a result, most of the information we read is inaccurate. v.1

Nowadays, anyone can post information on the internet even if it is incorrect. As a result, most of the information we read is inaccurate. v. 1
As millions of people and organisations of all stripes can post information on the Internet, more people don’t deem the content they see online accurate. However, there is still credible information on the Internet, which is harder to be ferreted out. It is understandable that people desire to be focused on, especially those who want to become stars, the Internet is the most effective way to make this happen. Thus this drives many of them to spread their personal information to attract more viewers so that one day their gifts may be paid attention to. Also, for some business organisations, they usually create exaggerated advertisements to propagate their products, while actually, their products are not as perfect as the advertisements described. On the other hand, in some repressive regimes, media is closely tied to the government. Media outlets provide information not for the well-being of civilians but for the propaganda of the regime so that they can control the regime for their own interests. However, all those critics of Internet information do not mean that there is little reliable information. After all, there are people telling lies out of their personal interests, there are definitely a large group of people being against lies and keeping digging the truth, though. Therefore, the target that those authoritative organisations and individuals posting their information is, to tell the truth, and clear the clouds, which makes their information accurate and reliable. After all, in the world with diverse cultures and races, it is impossible to guarantee all information being objectively accurate. All we should do is to keep a clear head and become more efficient to sort out the accurate information from those detrimentally false so that we can stand on the impartial side.
As millions of
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people
and
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organisations
of all stripes can post
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information
on the Internet, more
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people
don’t deem the content they
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see
online
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accurate
.
However
, there is
still
credible
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information
on the Internet, which is harder to
be ferreted
out.

It is understandable that
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people
desire to
be focused
on,
especially
those who want to become stars, the Internet is the most effective way to
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make
this happen.
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Thus
this drives
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many
of them to spread their personal
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information
to attract more viewers
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so
that one day their gifts may
be paid
attention to.
Also
, for
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some
business
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organisations
, they
usually
create exaggerated advertisements to propagate their products, while actually, their products are not as perfect as the advertisements
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described
.

On the other hand
, in
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some
repressive regimes, media is
closely
tied to the
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government
. Media outlets provide
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information
not for the well-being of civilians
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but
for the propaganda of the regime
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so
that they can control the regime for their
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own
interests.

However
, all those critics of Internet
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information
do not mean that there is
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little
reliable
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information
.
After all
, there are
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people
telling lies out of their personal interests, there are definitely a large
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group
of
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people
being against lies and keeping digging the truth, though.
Therefore
, the target that those authoritative
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organisations
and individuals posting their
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information
is, to
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tell
the truth, and
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clear
the clouds, which
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makes
their
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information
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accurate
and reliable.

After all
, in the world with diverse cultures and races, it is impossible to guarantee all
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information
being
objectively
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accurate
. All we should do is to
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keep
a
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clear
head and become more efficient to sort out the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accurate
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information
from those
detrimentally
false
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so
that we can stand on the impartial side.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, anyone can post information on the internet even if it is incorrect. As a result, most of the information we read is inaccurate. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
290 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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