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Now organise your ideas and write your essay: start with an introducton, then add 2 body paraphs and conclusion. Remember to use complex grammar and vocabulary and check your essay for any mistakes. Make sure you have more than 250 words.

Now organise your ideas and write your essay: start with an introducton, then add 2 body paraphs and conclusion. Remember to use complex grammar and vocabulary and check your essay for any mistakes. Make sure you have more than 250 words. 1ArDG
Thanks to the improvements in media technology, people now have access to TV in a 24/7 regime. According to some people, watching TV can make a contribution to the learning of children in the educational case, meanwhile, others have an adverse opinion. I completely agree with the presented idea which mentions benefits to education since TV can offer passive learning and also being informed about the latest trends and events. Passive learning is a crucial tool for everyone in the contemporary world. Just watching one television program is easier compared to an active mode of study where a strong focus is required and makes the pressure as well. Also, it is important to mention that people enjoy learning in an environment without physical and mental effort. This type of learning is essentially beneficial for children who are mastering a new foreign language that wants to develop their listening or speaking skills. Thus, watching TV makes sense, if youth consider making a part of their study in a passive way. Numerous events, discoveries, and different stories happen every second of time in the world. The media products and services of TV channels make the coming generation more encouraged about the future life of humanity in space, more cautious when comes to global warming, a natural disorder of seasonality, a deficit of water and food among poor countries, and more responsible due to crimes and discrimination in society, political games among the governments. To sum up, watching TV helps to grow the mindset of children in knowledge and information related to today’s world.
Thanks to the improvements in media technology,
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people
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now
have access to TV in a 24/7 regime. According to
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some
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people
, watching TV can
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make
a contribution to the
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learning
of children in the educational case, meanwhile, others have an adverse opinion. I completely
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agree
with the presented
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
which mentions benefits to education since TV can offer passive
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learning
and
also
being informed
about the latest trends and
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events
.

Passive
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learning
is a crucial tool for everyone in the contemporary world.
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Just
watching one television program is easier compared to an active mode of study where a strong focus
is required
and
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makes
the pressure
as well
.
Also
, it is
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important
to mention that
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people
enjoy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
in an environment without physical and mental effort. This type of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
is
essentially
beneficial for children who are mastering a new foreign language that wants to develop their listening or speaking
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
Thus
, watching TV
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
makes
sense, if youth consider making a part of their study
Consider replacing "in a passive way" with the adverb for "passive"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a passive way
.

Numerous
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events
, discoveries, and
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different
stories happen every second of time in the world. The media products and services of TV channels
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
the coming generation more encouraged about the future life of humanity in space, more cautious when
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to global warming, a natural disorder of seasonality, a deficit of water and food among poor countries, and more responsible due to crimes and discrimination in society, political games among the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
.

To sum up, watching TV
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to grow the mindset of children in knowledge and information related to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
’s world.
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IELTS essay Now organise your ideas and write your essay: start with an introducton, then add 2 body paraphs and conclusion. Remember to use complex grammar and vocabulary and check your essay for any mistakes. Make sure you have more than 250 words.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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