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Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed? KMn9
Nowadays people are focusing on self-satisfaction. Due to the fact that they are becoming self-employed rather then to do work for a company or an organization. On the face of it, the disadvantage seems most apparent. To begin with, an increasing number of youngsters choose to start their own business because of freedom, they don't want to depend on the other person. First thing, if a person is self-employed he has no boundation of time, he can do work according to themselves. They don't have to follow the rules and regulations, he has full liberty. For instance: if a person is working in an army then he has to follow the rule and regulations like: they have to wear proper dress code and wake up early etc. If a person is doing work in a company he has to follow the rules and regulations and do work according to the company. They don't have the right to do work according to themselves. In light of the fact that sometimes people got frustrated. Not everyone appreciates being bound by the rules that someone else has made. Another point of paramount disadvantage, being self-employed is that requires a great deal of self-discipline to succeed. The person is not answerable to anyone when working for himself and many times they miss the deadline. Furthermore, on skipping deadlines or missing the set targets there will be no one to bear the consequences of himself. Owning to the fact that, the person is becoming careless. It is not a piece of cake to become self-employed it required a stable income. It takes years for a self-employed person to establish themselves in their field and until then there is no guarantee that they will earn enough to make a living. For example: if the business faced a crisis then the person the oughts to bear the losses, and he or she would be responsible to give the answer to everybody. Due to the fact that a number of people do suicide or go into depression. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that it is quite evident from the above-mentioned analysis that the need for liberty and freedom made people want to follow the path of self-employment, on the contrary they may fail if they deviate from the set targets due to a lack of discipline.
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people
are focusing on self-satisfaction. Due to the
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fact
that they are becoming self-employed
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then
to do
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company
or an organization. On the face of it, the disadvantage seems most apparent. To
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begin
with, an increasing number of youngsters choose to
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start
their
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own
business
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because
of freedom, they don't want to depend on the other
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person
.
First
thing, if a
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person
is self-employed he has no
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boundation
of time, he can do
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work
according to themselves. They don't
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have to
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follow
the
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rules
and regulations, he has full liberty.
For instance
: if a
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person
is working in an army then he
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has to
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follow
the
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rule
and regulations like: they
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have to
wear proper dress code and wake up early etc. If a
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person
is doing
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work
in a
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company
he
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has to
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follow
the
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and regulations and do
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work
according to the
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company
. They don't have the right to do
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work
according to themselves. In light of the
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fact
that
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sometimes
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people
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got
frustrated. Not everyone appreciates
being bound
by the
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rules
that someone else has made. Another point of paramount disadvantage, being self-employed is that requires a great deal of self-discipline to succeed. The
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person
is not answerable to anyone when working for himself and
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many
times they miss the deadline.
Furthermore
, on skipping deadlines or missing the set targets there will be no one to bear the consequences of himself. Owning to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fact
that, the
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person
is becoming careless. It is not a piece of cake to become self-employed it required a stable income. It takes years for a self-employed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
to establish themselves in their field and until then there is no guarantee that they will earn
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enough
to
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make
a living.
For example
: if the business faced a crisis then the
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person
the
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oughts
to bear the losses, and he or she would be responsible to give the answer to everybody. Due to the
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fact
that a number of
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people
do suicide or go into depression.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that it is quite evident from the above-mentioned analysis that the need for liberty and freedom made
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people
want to
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follow
the path of self-employment,
on the contrary
they may fail if they deviate from the set targets due to a lack of discipline.
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IELTS essay Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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