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NOT ENOUGH STUDENTS AROUND THE WORLD CHOOSE TO STUDY SCIENCE SUBJECTS AT UNIVERSITY. WHAT IMPACT DOES THIS ISSUE HAVE ON SOCIETY? GIVE REASONS FOR YOUR ANSWERS AND INCLUDE ANY RELEVANT EXAMPLES FROM YOUR KNOWLEDGE OR EXPERIENCE. WRITE AT LEAST 250 WORDS.

Nowadays an insufficient number of students worldwide enroll in scientific college studies. Scientific studies as such mathematics, physics and biology are not popular among university students. This trend is probably caused by the difficulty of this type of subjects. As an instance, a bachelor degree in biology requires not only a significant time spent on books, but also an extensive number of hours spent in a laboratory. Furthermore, the scientific curriculum taught in high schools is often not sufficient to properly prepare the future university students to subjects such as physics. For example, several fellow students, who attended my school and decided to study science subjects at university, needed to arrange additional private classes in order to prepare for their college admission exams. Their high school preparation had proven not yet adequate to study science subjects at college. Finally, college degrees which can assure a more successful and well-paid career, e. g. law or economics, are frequently prefered over science-oriented studies. Whereas the commitment when studying biology and economics can be comparable, I believe young people tend to choose a bachelor degree that can land them a high-earning job. The impopularity of science subjects at college has numerous and significant consequences on our society. Firsty, if only a minority of the population acquires a scientific degrees, there will be less people professionally equipped and prepared for certain roles. This tendency will thus create an umbalanced job market. Secondly, a reduction in students interested in scientific fields is deprimental to the scientic research, as less scientists are involved in groundbreaking studies. In addition to this, scientific researches often require sponsors to substain and promote them. Without the correct scientific preparation a reduced number of people will support the scientific research and several breakthroughs will not happen.
Nowadays an insufficient number of
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students
worldwide enroll in
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scientific
college studies.

Scientific
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studies
as such mathematics, physics and biology are not popular among university students.

This trend is
probably
caused by the difficulty of this type of subjects.

As an instance, a bachelor
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degree
in biology requires not
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only
a significant time spent on books,
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but
also
an extensive number of hours spent in a laboratory.

Furthermore
, the
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scientific
curriculum taught in high schools is
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often
not sufficient to
properly
prepare the future university
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students
to
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subjects
such as physics.
For example
, several fellow
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students
, who attended my school and decided to
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study
science
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subjects
at university, needed to arrange additional private classes in order to prepare for their college admission exams. Their high school preparation had proven not
yet
adequate to
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study
science
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subjects
at college.

Finally
, college
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degrees
which can assure a more successful and well-paid career,
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e. g.
law or economics, are
frequently
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prefered
over science-oriented
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studies
. Whereas the commitment when studying biology and economics can be comparable, I believe young
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people
tend to choose a bachelor
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degree
that can land them a high-earning job.

The
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impopularity
of science
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subjects
at college has numerous and significant consequences on our society.

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Firsty
, if
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only
a minority of the population acquires a
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scientific
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degrees
, there will be
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less
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people
professionally
equipped and prepared for certain roles. This tendency will
thus
create an
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umbalanced
job market.

Secondly
, a reduction in
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students
interested in
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scientific
fields is
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deprimental
to the
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scientic
research, as
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less
scientists
are involved
in groundbreaking studies.

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to this,
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researches
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often
require sponsors to
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substain
and promote them. Without the correct
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scientific
preparation a
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reduced
number of
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people
will support the
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scientific
research and several breakthroughs will not happen.
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IELTS essay NOT ENOUGH STUDENTS AROUND THE WORLD CHOOSE TO STUDY SCIENCE SUBJECTS AT UNIVERSITY. WHAT IMPACT DOES THIS ISSUE HAVE ON SOCIETY?

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