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2000's, a beautiful decade where online films and music were not a big deal since revenue was the lowest thanks to MTV and Blockbuster. Likewise, home broadband was generating income under fifty million pounds. The peak was between two hundred and two fifty hundred with telephones which to year 2015 declined to less than two hundred million being exceeded by home broadbands for a little bit. The future projections for year 2030 is that home broadbands will have more demand, as well as, online film and music getting an increase income from less than a hundred million in year 2015 to one hundred fifty million in year 2030. Nevertheless, telephones will be used and still generate a revenue of a little bit more than 150 million pounds.
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2015 declined to less than two hundred
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broadbands
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little bit
.

The future projections for
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2030 is that home
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will have more demand,
as well
as, online film and music getting an increase income from less than a hundred
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million
in
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2015 to one hundred fifty
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2030.
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IELTS essay Northcom' Largest Products

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
127 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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