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News media is important in our society. Why is it so important? Do you think its influence is generally positive or negative? v.1

News media is important in our society. Why is it so important? Do you think its influence is generally positive or negative? v. 1
The news media has gained a lot of importance in our society. Through News media we come to know about the daily issues of the community. The news is readily available through newspapers, magazines, television, radio and the internet. Each and every media is a powerful medium, in itself. I personally feel that there is a positive impact of news on people. News help people to learn something new every day. In addition to that it helps people to develop an open and critical mind. As a citizen of a country we all should be aware of our country's economic situation, sports, games which are very well provided through news media and not only one's country news, News about the whole world is presented. Probing further, we can say News allows us to have a broader understanding of local, national and international affairs. News is not only limited educational purpose. It has also come up as the source of entertainment. We can get to know about the release date of the new films and what's going on in the lives of our favourite film stars. However, there are other aspects too, whereas on one hand News is considered as a medium through which we come to know about the economic situation of our country but nowadays the focus of the News has shifted to some less important aspects such as news about film stars are coming to light instead of some serious issues. All in all, I strongly feel that the news media play a crucial role in the society. Internet has emerged as a strong medium of news. Because of news media more awareness is spread among the masses, especially the youth of the country is more enlightened.
The
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has gained
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a lot of
importance in our society.
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News
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media
we
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come
to know about the daily issues of the community. The
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news
is
readily
available
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through
newspapers, magazines, television, radio and the internet. Each and every
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media
is a powerful medium, in itself. I
personally
feel that there is a
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positive
impact of
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news
on
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people
.

News
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help
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people
to learn something
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new
every day.
In addition
to that it
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helps
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people
to develop an open and critical mind. As a citizen of a
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country
we all should be aware of our country's economic situation, sports, games which are
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very
well provided
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through
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news
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media
and not
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only
one's
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country
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news
,
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News
about the whole world
is presented
.

Probing
further
, we can say
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News
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allows
us to have a broader understanding of local, national and international affairs.
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News
is not
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only
limited educational purpose. It has
also
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come
up as the source of entertainment. We can
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get
to know about the release date of the
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new
films and what's going on in the
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lives
of our
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favourite
film stars.

However
, there are other aspects too, whereas on one hand
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News
is considered
as a medium
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through
which we
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come
to know about the economic situation of our
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country
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but
nowadays the focus of the
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News
has shifted to
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some
less
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important
aspects such as
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news
about film stars are coming to light
instead
of
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some
serious issues.

All in all, I
strongly
feel that the
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news
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media
play a crucial role in the society. Internet has emerged as a strong medium of
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news
.
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Because
of
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news
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media
more awareness
is spread
among the masses,
especially
the youth of the
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country
is more enlightened.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay News media is important in our society. Why is it so important? Do you think its influence is generally positive or negative? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
289 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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