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News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? v.4

News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? v. 4
At the present time, editors decide what kind of news should be shown on television and what kind of news should be printed in newspapers and magazines. It doesn’t matter to them what sort of news, bad or good, their sole wish to make sense even from bad news. Therefore, there is a lot of bad news, which became popular and they have an impact on people. Maybe we have to announce only good news and hide the bad ones. If we look at today’s world, news sources like newspapers, magazines, television news etc. Play very important role in our society. These sources give us information about the world. Firstly it's noticeable that you can see all types of information on TV or newspaper, beginning with the opening of new car factories and culminating with disasters. But you can’t decide what kind of news you want to read on your morning routine, it is decided by the news editors. They will choose which news to publish. Secondly, editors need your attention so they publish the most interesting news, like Death of Laden or flood in Japan. Thus, people made familiar with that kind of news. In addition, news has the big influence on people, one bad news can affect thousands of people and the same if it would be a good one. To sum up, although some people believe that only good news should be shown or published, in my view, everybody has to know what’s going on in the world and must feel the reality of the life.
At the present time, editors decide what
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, their sole wish to
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.
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, there is
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, which became
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popular and
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. Maybe we
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and
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ones.

If we look at
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’s world,
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sources like newspapers, magazines, television
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etc. Play
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role in our society. These sources give us information about the world.
Firstly
it's noticeable that you can
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see
all types of information on TV or newspaper, beginning with the opening of
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new
car factories and culminating with disasters.
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you want to read on your morning routine, it
is decided
by the
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editors. They will choose which
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to publish.

Secondly
, editors need your attention
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so
they publish the most interesting
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, like Death of Laden or flood in Japan.
Thus
,
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people
made familiar with that
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of
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news
.
In addition
,
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has the
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influence on
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, one
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bad
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can affect thousands of
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and the same if it would be a
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one. To sum up, although
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some
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people
believe that
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should
be shown
or published, in my view, everybody
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has to
know what’s going on in the world and
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must
feel the reality of the life.
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IELTS essay News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? v. 4

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
259 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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