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Need of variation in retirement age

Need of variation in retirement age 0AoV9

Retirement is the end goal of majority of people. Everyone plans their saving and work for higher income while keeping the retirement age back of their minds. I think that setting a same retirement age for all the professions is illogical, let alone unfair and I am in favor of having various retirement age according to respective sectors. Generally, the age of 65 is accepted as the retirement year and this is the case of several sectors be it information technology, management, civil servant, and many more. But the thing is, the age should be set according to the type if job a person does in a particular field. For instance, the athletes retire in their early or mid 30's as their body no longer perform efficiently and they past their prime in late 20's.

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. Everyone plans their saving and work for higher income while keeping the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withevacuationpulloutwithdrawal
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age
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think
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age
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retirement
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age
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. 