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n this tecnological era, there are amendous medecines and techniques are available to cure number of severe infections, and deseases. Eventhough, it is more crucial to cure ailment rather then it's treatment.

n this tecnological era, there are amendous medecines and techniques are available to cure number of severe infections, and deseases. Eventhough, it is more crucial to cure ailment rather then it's treatment. YgMWm
In this tecnological era, there are amendous medecines and techniques are available to cure number of severe infections, and deseases. Eventhough, it is more crucial to cure ailment rather then it's treatment. Moreover, government should promote this by funding. I completely agree with the former view. To begin with, unhygiene is the major factor for health issues, consequently, underdeveloping countries are suffering from various diseases. For example, the one eating unhygenic street food which causes health problem such as obacity, moreover, by eating contaminated food or water one can suffer from diarrhea, cholera, etc. Due to given reasons, people ought to prevent the diseases. Furthermore, pathogens are continuesly emerging themsleves to cause stronger illness which is arduous to cure. For example, nowadays the whole world is suffering from dangerous strain of COVID 19 pendamic virus. Initially, it is very hard to control this virus for government and people as well, if administration take a step to prevent the spread of this pathogen, then the whole world will not be suffering from this situation. Additionally, nowadys the treatment is much more expensive as compared to back in a days. For example, the treatment for cancer is too costly, that a normal or a middle class person cannot afford it. Hence, it is advisible that, people should take care by themselves against various diseases. Further, not only people can solve this problem individually but, government should also take a part in it in terms of funding, helping people and in various activities. For example, government should use pestecides to prevent various insect transmission diseases. In addition, the governmnet should educate the citizens inregards of hygieness, quality of living, eating and cleanliness. Lastly, the funding for health care sector should be provided by the government. Moreover, administration can increase the number of public health care center in each cities and rural areas, so people can cure the diseases at minimal cost.
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tecnological
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amendous
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medecines
and techniques are available to
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cure
number of severe infections, and
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deseases
.
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Eventhough
, it is more crucial to
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cure
ailment
rather
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then
it's treatment.
Moreover
,
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government
should promote this by funding. I completely
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agree
with the former view.

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begin
with,
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unhygiene
is the major factor for
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health
issues,
consequently
,
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underdeveloping
countries are suffering from
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various
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diseases
. For
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example
, the one eating
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unhygenic
street food which causes
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health
problem such as
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obacity
,
moreover
, by eating contaminated food or water one can suffer from diarrhea, cholera, etc. Due to
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given
reasons,
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people
ought to
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prevent
the
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diseases
.
Furthermore
, pathogens are
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continuesly
emerging
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themsleves
to cause stronger illness which is arduous to
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cure
. For
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example
, nowadays the whole world is suffering from
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dangerous
strain of
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COVID 19
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pendamic
virus.
Initially
, it is
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very
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hard
to control this virus for
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government
and
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people
as well
, if administration take a step to
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prevent
the spread of this pathogen, then the whole world will not be suffering from this situation.
Additionally
,
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nowadys
the treatment is much more expensive as compared to back in
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a days
. For
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example
, the treatment for cancer is too costly, that a normal or a middle
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class
person cannot afford it.
Hence
, it is
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advisible
that,
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people
should take care by themselves against
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various
diseases.

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, not
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only
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people
can solve this problem
individually
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but
,
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government
should
also
take a part in it in terms of funding, helping
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people
and in
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various
activities. For
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example
,
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government
should
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use
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pestecides
to
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prevent
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various
insect transmission
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diseases
.
In addition
, the
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governmnet
should educate the citizens
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inregards
of
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hygieness
, quality of living, eating and cleanliness.
Lastly
, the funding for
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health
care sector should
be provided
by the
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government
.
Moreover
, administration can increase the number of public
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health
care center in each
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cities
and rural areas,
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so
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people
can
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cure
the
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diseases
at minimal cost.
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IELTS essay n this tecnological era, there are amendous medecines and techniques are available to cure number of severe infections, and deseases. Eventhough, it is more crucial to cure ailment rather then it's treatment.

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