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N SPITE OF THE ADVANCES MADE IN AGRICULTURE, MANY PEOPLE AROUND THE WORLD STILL GO HUNGRY. WHY IS THIS CASE? WHAT CAN BE DONE ABOUT THIS PROBLEM?

Although there has been a significant increase in agricultural advancements, a number of people across the world are striving for food. This is mainly because of an increase in population and loss of soil fertility. There are numerous solutions to deal with the hunger problem all over the world Firstly, population growth is a major problem. In other words, the rising of the population has had an adverse impact on food production. For example, the food produced from agriculture in Norway is only 45% of the country’s population while the rest of the people there live with hunger. Another reason would be infertile soil. Using chemicals such as insecticides and pesticides for growing crops resulted in the loss of fertility of the soil. Because of which land becomes barren after growing plants for some years leaving people without enough food. One obvious solution would be to control the population. To be more specific, by controlling the birth rate around the world, this problem would mitigate to the most extent. To illustrate, chinese government recently has passed a law of having only one child for each family which would control the country’s population and thereby the food produced will be enough to feed their people. Switching to organic ways of growing cultivation would be another way to solve this issue. Only by using bio-waste and organic manure can the fertility of the soil be retained. In conclusion, it seems that controlling the rate of birth and avoiding hazardous chemicals to grow plants are the most effective solutions to curb this problem. If the government take necessary measures to provide food, there would be enough food for everyone in the world.
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across the world are striving for
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of an increase in
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and loss of
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fertility. There are numerous solutions to deal with the hunger
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all over the
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Firstly
,
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growth is a major
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.
In other words
, the rising of the
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population
has had an adverse impact on
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food
production.
For example
, the
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food
produced from agriculture in Norway is
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only
45% of the country’s
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population
while the rest of the
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people
there
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live
with hunger. Another reason would be infertile
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soil
. Using chemicals such as insecticides and pesticides for growing crops resulted in the loss of fertility of the
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soil
.
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of which land becomes barren after growing plants for
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years leaving
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people
without
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food.

One obvious solution would be to control the
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population
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would mitigate to the most extent. To illustrate,
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chinese
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recently has passed a law of having
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only
one child for each family which would control the country’s
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population
and thereby the
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food
produced will be
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enough
to feed their
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people
. Switching to organic ways of growing cultivation would be another way to solve this issue.
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Only
by using bio-waste and organic manure can the fertility of the
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soil
be retained
.

In conclusion
, it seems that controlling the rate of birth and avoiding hazardous chemicals to grow plants are the most effective solutions to curb this
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problem
. If the
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government
take necessary measures to provide
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food
, there would be
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enough
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food
for everyone in the world.
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IELTS essay N SPITE OF THE ADVANCES MADE IN AGRICULTURE, MANY PEOPLE AROUND THE WORLD STILL GO HUNGRY. WHY IS THIS CASE? WHAT CAN BE DONE ABOUT THIS PROBLEM?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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