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n recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative?

n recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative? gdnA
It is true that these days the family structure has considerably shifted, and the changing roles of men and women in the family has become increasingly similar. There are several new forms of family composition, and in my opinion, these developments are not always desirable. In the past, nuclear families where parents and their offspring living together under one roof used to be prevalent. However, there is now a huge trend towards single-parent families due to more marriages ending in divorce, while the increase in cohabiting couple families and stepfamilies is probably a result of cohabitation and remarriage becoming much more acceptable. In addition, the number of single mother families has increased as many mothers want to have children without getting married. In terms of changing parental roles in a family, there has been a rise in the number of stay-at-home dads in recent years when it has become normal for women to gain qualifications and pursue their own career path. This is in sharp contrast to about half a decade ago when men were breadwinners and women were in charge of household chores in their families. In my view, the changes described above could have both positive and negative consequences. On the one hand, due to the lack of emotional attachment and legal binding, non-traditional households such as stepfamilies and cohabiting parents are more prone to breaking down. Consequently, children of these families are more likely to be involved in antisocial behaviors while their parent may experience feelings of loneliness and worry. On the other hand, the changes in the roles of members in the family could be seen as progress because women are not put under pressure to sacrifice their own careers to assume childcare and domestic responsibilities. In conclusion, I believe that the changes in the roles of family members and the family structure are both positive and negative because of the aforementioned reasons.
It is true that these days the
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structure has
considerably
shifted, and the changing
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roles
of
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men
and
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women
in the
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family
has become
increasingly
similar. There are several new forms of
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family
composition, and in my opinion, these developments are not always desirable.

In the past, nuclear
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families
where parents and their offspring living together under one roof
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used
to be prevalent.
However
, there is
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now
a huge trend towards single-parent
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families
due to more marriages ending in divorce, while the increase in cohabiting couple
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families
and stepfamilies is
probably
a result of cohabitation and remarriage becoming much more acceptable.
In addition
, the number of single mother
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families
has increased as
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many
mothers want to have children without getting married. In terms of changing parental
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roles
in a
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family
, there has been a rise in the number of stay-at-home dads in recent years when it has become normal for
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women
to gain qualifications and pursue their
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own
career path. This is in sharp contrast to about half a decade ago when
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men
were breadwinners and
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women
were in charge of household chores in their families.

In my view, the
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changes
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described
above could have both
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positive
and
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negative
consequences. On the one hand, due to the lack of emotional attachment and legal binding, non-traditional households such as stepfamilies and cohabiting parents are more prone to breaking down.
Consequently
, children of these
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families
are more likely to
be involved
in antisocial behaviors while their parent may experience feelings of loneliness and worry.
On the other hand
, the
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changes
in the
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roles
of members in the
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family
could be
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seen
as progress
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because
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women
are not put under pressure to sacrifice their
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own
careers to assume childcare and domestic responsibilities.

In conclusion
, I believe that the
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changes
in the
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roles
of
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members and the
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structure are both
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positive
and
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negative
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because
of the aforementioned reasons.
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IELTS essay n recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative?

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