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n high school, I have had a keen interest in mathematics and technical programming fields, whi

n high school, I have had a keen interest in mathematics and technical programming fields, whi BrOw
Since being in high school, I have had a keen interest in mathematics and technical programming fields, which turned into a passion, resulting in learning and using a number of programming languages, and analytics tools such as SQL, C#, and SPSS. Besides, I did analytics work which helped me get an ISO certificate for ADAM hospital in 2012. Recently, I have also supported the company where I work now in delivering many applications for many brands, such as Costa and Slim chicken, and received a team award for this in 2020. With working experience of more than 8 years in various fields of business, I consider myself an intermediator( facilitator ) between IT and business. I have the substantial ability to understand any business process extremely quickly, so I can identify required IT support. As a business or data analyst, I will work as a translator between two different groups Business and IT. Thus, I have to be well versed in both fields. This is wyhat drove me to apply for this program in this business school. I am completely confident that doing this master's degree at this university will be a tremendous advance in my future career
Since being in high school, I have had a keen interest in mathematics and technical programming fields, which turned into a passion, resulting in learning and using a number of programming languages, and analytics tools such as SQL, C#, and
SPSS
.

Besides
, I did analytics work which
helped
me
get
an ISO certificate for ADAM hospital in 2012. Recently, I have
also
supported the
company
where I work
now
in delivering
many
applications for
many
brands, such as Costa and Slim chicken, and received a team award for this in 2020. With working experience of more than 8 years in various fields of
business
, I consider myself an
intermediator
(
facilitator
)
between IT and
business
. I have the substantial ability to understand any
business
process
extremely
quickly
,
so
I can identify required IT support. As a
business
or data analyst, I will work as a translator between two
different
groups
Business
and IT.
Thus
, I
have to
be well versed in both fields. This is
wyhat
drove me to apply for this program in this
business
school. I am completely confident that doing this master's degree at this university will be a tremendous advance in my future
career
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IELTS essay n high school, I have had a keen interest in mathematics and technical programming fields, whi

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