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I think advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. I have five reasons for support my opinion. First, it is my personal thing, when I watch the advertise about products I want to the product very much. Second, while I am using the internet especially yahoo I find many it. In my opinion, this is indicate that demand of it is high. If we do not have to, such a thing would not come out. Third, there is a fact that the sales in the advertising industry is growing. And the difference is obvious, compared to the past. Four, these days many unique and fantastic commercials are producing. They nail people's eyes. I think this is the more popularity of the advertising industry. Five, the reaction to people around me about advertising goods is very good. For example, my mother and father watch the advertise they says "It looks so good I want to buy it". They always praise them and very little to say. Advertise has a big power of selling products. I am sure that people who think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it is not wrong. I know a little bit of what they say. But from a variety of perspectives, the sales of the advertising industries are coming up. In my opinion, advertises are strongly supporting our economy. All things considered, I agree with the people who say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things.
I
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advertising is
extremely
successful at persuading us to
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buy
things. I have five reasons for support my opinion.
First
, it is my personal thing, when I
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watch
the
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advertise
about products I want to the product
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much. Second, while I am using the internet
especially
yahoo I find
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many
it. In my opinion, this is
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indicate
that demand of it is high. If we do not
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have to
, such a thing would not
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come
out. Third, there is a fact that the sales in the advertising industry is growing. And the difference is obvious, compared to the past. Four, these days
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many
unique and fantastic commercials are producing. They nail
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people
's eyes. I
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think
this is the more popularity of the advertising industry. Five, the reaction to
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people
around me about advertising
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goods
is
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very
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good
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For example
, my mother and father
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watch
the
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advertise
they
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says
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It looks
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I want to
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buy
it
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"
. They always praise them and
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very
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to say.
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Advertise
has a
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big
power of selling products. I am sure that
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people
who
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think
that advertising is
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so
common that we no longer pay attention to it is not
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wrong
. I know a
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little bit
of what they say.
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But
from a variety of perspectives, the sales of the advertising industries are coming up. In my opinion,
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advertises
are
strongly
supporting our economy. All things considered, I
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agree
with the
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people
who say that advertising is
extremely
successful at persuading us to
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buy
things.
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IELTS essay My opinion about the page 72

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
253 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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