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My one academic year in Iqanat school

My one academic year in Iqanat school 159aA
My name is Akhmadi and I studying in IQanat High school of Burabay now. I have studied here since September of this year. I was very happy when I entered this school. Because I knew it was a great opportunity for the future. But my parents were against my coming. Because I was the youngest in the family, I had to stay in the village. However, fortunately, my older brothers and sisters persuaded my parents. So, I entered this school. Thanks to this, I found many friends and improved my skills. Before I went to this school, I thought I did not need English. Because I wondered why a person living in a village needs English. But now learning English is one of my main goals. In one year, my English has changed a lot. I improved my speaking, grammar and listening. The level of education here is higher than in my previous school. I am good at math. Fortunately, here I am studying in high math group. This summer I have many plans. Firstly, I want to improve my English. Secondly, I want to meet my friends and spend time with them. Then the rest of the summer I will go to the courses to prepare for the UNT.
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and I studying in
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IQanat
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Burabay
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my parents were against my coming.
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, I entered this
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, I
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Because
I wondered why a person living in a village needs English.
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But
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now
learning English is one of my main goals. In one year, my English has
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changed
a lot. I
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improved
my speaking, grammar and listening. The level of education here is higher than in my previous
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school
. I am
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good
at math.
Fortunately
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This summer I have
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improve
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meet
my friends and spend time with them. Then the rest of the summer I will go to the courses to prepare for the UNT.
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IELTS essay My one academic year in Iqanat school

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
210 words
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