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My Brother's Routine Week Work

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Mohammad is my only brother in blood. I was not good well with him until my father got cancer in his liver and died, then everything has changed, and he became close to me. He is a computer teacher. He gets up at 7: 00 A. M to pick up his children to the school. After that, he has breakfast in a restaurant which is bean cooked in Arabic way. Then he looks for passengers to pick up them to where they want to go. Ordinarily, he works to get extra money because life became too expensive. However, he goes to get his children back at 2 P. M then he gets lunch with us. After that, he goes to his job and returns at 8 P. M to get dinner. Then he goes out to play cards with his friends, then he comes back to sleep at 12 A. M.
Mohammad is my
only
brother in blood. I was not
good
well with him until my father
got
cancer in his liver and
died
, then everything has
changed
, and he became close to me.

He is a computer teacher. He
gets
up at 7: 00 A. M to pick up his children to the school. After that, he has breakfast in a restaurant which is bean cooked in Arabic way. Then he looks for passengers to pick up them to where they want to go.
Ordinarily
, he works to
get
extra money
because
life became too expensive.
However
, he goes to
get
his children back at 2 P. M then he
gets
lunch with us. After that, he goes to his job and returns at 8 P. M to
get
dinner. Then he goes out to play cards with his friends, then he
comes
back to sleep at 12 A. M.
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IELTS essay My Brother's Routine Week Work

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
151 words
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