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my beautiful home in my memory

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Many people dream to have a modern house located in the city, however, I love my house in my peaceful hometown. My house has only 2 floors and is not spacious, but the space is enough for a family to live cosily. My father painted the house blue, which is my favourite colour, and the ceiling is beautifully decorated with star and moon ornaments. My mother loves natural lights rather than artificial lights so each room has its own large windows. There is a balcony in my bedroom, where I can enjoy the breathtaking view of the sea every morning. We have a large garden where we plant flowers, which I can’t have if we live in the city. Because I have a job in the city, I only visit my house twice a month. The time I live in my house with my parents is always the best part of my life.
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large windows. There is a balcony in my bedroom, where I can enjoy the breathtaking view of the sea every morning. We have a large garden where we plant flowers, which I can’t have if we
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IELTS essay my beautiful home in my memory

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
153 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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