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Must students stay at school up to a specific age (e.g. 15 years old) before they are free to leave, or should students and their parents be free to decide when they leave school? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Must students stay at school up to a specific age (e. g. 15 years old) before they are free to leave, or should students and their parents be free to decide when they leave school? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. lWM5w
Nowadays, education systems around the world have seen an increase in the period of compulsory schooling for students. In developed countries students are now required to stay at school until they are 15 years of age. Although there are some dangers and disadvantages to taking a job, I believe that the convenience often outweighs any drawbacks. On the one hand, some governments in developing countries had an education policy, which is a master plan of education in ten years for citizens and everyone in the country has to follow it because it's the law. For example, in Thailand, if parents do not send children to graduate from high school, it will be illegal. However, it is for the country to be developed. all of which means that reason. On the other hand, others explain why students should be obliged to remain at school until a certain age. Firstly, children do not have the maturity to make decisions. So school is like giving knowledge before being an adult and going to live in the real world. Finally, The country wants to develop in all areas. Therefore, children are an important force in the development of the country. If you graduate from high school, you can lead the country to develop. In conclusion, there are various reasons to appreciate the arguments for both points of view. We must all consider the positive aspects of either staying at school up to a specific age, but I personally would prefer the necessary to education authorities. However, Governments should provide free education policies to everyone to reduce parental costs.
Nowadays,
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education
systems around the world have
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seen
an increase in the period of compulsory schooling for students. In developed
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countries
students are
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now
required to stay at
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school
until they are 15 years of age. Although there are
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some
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dangers
and disadvantages to taking a job, I believe that the convenience
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often
outweighs any drawbacks.

On the one hand,
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some
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governments
in developing
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countries
had an
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education
policy, which is a master plan of
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education
in ten years for citizens and everyone in the
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country
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has to
follow it
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because
it's the law.
For example
, in Thailand, if parents do not
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send
children to graduate from high
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school
, it will be illegal.
However
, it is for the
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country
to
be developed
.
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all
of which means that reason.

On the other hand
, others
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explain
why students should
be obliged
to remain at
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school
until a certain age.
Firstly
, children do not have the maturity to
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make
decisions.
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So
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school
is like giving knowledge
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before
being an adult and going to
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live
in the real world.
Finally
, The
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country
wants to develop in all areas.
Therefore
, children are an
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important
force in the development of the
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country
. If you graduate from high
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school
, you can lead the
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country
to develop.

In conclusion
, there are various reasons to appreciate the arguments for both points of view. We
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must
all consider the
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positive
aspects of either staying at
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school
up to a specific age,
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but
I
personally
would prefer the necessary to
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education
authorities.
However
,
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Governments
should provide free
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education
policies to everyone to
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reduce
parental costs.
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IELTS essay Must students stay at school up to a specific age (e. g. 15 years old) before they are free to leave, or should students and their parents be free to decide when they leave school? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
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