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Everyone wants to be as healthy as possible. Fortunately, in modern society there are many things that people can do to improve their physical condition. What do you think is the best way to stay healthy? -Get exercise on a regular basis-Eat healthy food e v.2

Everyone wants to be as healthy as possible. Fortunately, in modern society there are many things that people can do to improve their physical condition. What do you think is the best way to stay healthy? -Get exercise on a regular basis-Eat healthy food e v. 2
These days thanks to get access to to a variety of options, people can easily improve their health. In my opinion, if I forced to pick from those choices, I would definitely prefer the former one. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay. First and foremost, for centuries, exercise is the best friend for humans to help to relieve their depression and anxiety with ease. There are numerous benefits for doing exercises, such as it gives the person the time for self-introspection and a chance to forget about their misfortunes. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter profoundly influenced by my own experience. When I was in a college, I always struggle with my academic pressure and fear of failures on my grades. Initially, I didn’t pay attention to resolve those hardships and then I just inadvertently got used to it. After several months, I found myself with depression and headache due to the fact that I couldn’t manage my time with my rigid academic schedule. However, one day my cousin suggested me to do sports regularly and I decided to cope with it for doing exercise. Today I always walk in the morning and hike on the weekends. Consequently, my mental and physical health is gradually improved and I have become more optimistic day by day. Secondly, these days a lot of young people have obesity and other health issues. Nevertheless, doing exercise gives them best fit and besides it becomes the insurance of your longevity. Drawing from my own experience, Two years ago, I really addicted to eating a lot especially in ice-creams and cakes; as a result, I became overweight. For the young woman, it seemed to be such a shame and I couldn’t even stop eating. Furthermore, I have tried a lot of medicals and even have thought about the surgeries, but I finally grounded with the idea of doing exercises in my daily life. For the first time, it was really hard to intensively do workouts because I expected too much from myself within a short amount of time. Then, I have changed my daily exercise schedule based on my interesting sports on account of the fact that my previous one didn’t give me a good result. As a result, all hard work paid off and I gained my confidence again in front of the public. In conclusion, I truly believe that doing exercise is a better way to keep up your health this is because it is the best way to clear out your mental depression and because it gives you best fit that you can build yourself comparing to other choices.
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people
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health
. In my opinion, if I forced to pick from those choices, I would definitely prefer the former one. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

First
and foremost, for centuries,
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exercise
is the
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best
friend for humans to
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help
to relieve their depression and anxiety with
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ease
. There are numerous benefits for
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doing
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exercises
, such as it
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gives
the person the
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time
for self-introspection and a chance to forget about their misfortunes. I
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have to
admit that my opinion on this matter
profoundly
influenced by my
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own
experience. When I was in a college, I always struggle with my academic pressure and fear of failures on my grades.
Initially
, I didn’t pay attention to resolve those hardships and then I
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inadvertently
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got
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to it. After several months, I found myself with depression and headache due to the fact that I couldn’t manage my
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time
with my rigid academic schedule.
However
, one day my cousin suggested me to do sports
regularly
and I decided to cope with it for
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doing
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exercise
.
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Today
I always walk in the morning and hike on the weekends.
Consequently
, my mental and physical
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health
is
gradually
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improved
and I have become more optimistic day by day.

Secondly
, these days
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a lot of
young
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people
have obesity and other
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health
issues.
Nevertheless
,
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doing
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exercise
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gives
them
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best
fit and
besides
it becomes the insurance of your longevity. Drawing from my
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own
experience, Two years ago, I
really
addicted to eating a lot
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in ice-creams and cakes;
as a result
, I became overweight. For the young woman, it seemed to be such a shame and I couldn’t even
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stop
eating.
Furthermore
, I have tried
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a lot of
medicals and even have
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thought
about the surgeries,
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finally
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in my daily life. For the
first
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, it was
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to
intensively
do workouts
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I
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too much from myself within a short amount of
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. Then, I have
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changed
my daily
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schedule based on my interesting sports on account of the fact that my previous one didn’t
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me a
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result.
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, all
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work paid off and I gained my confidence again in front of the public.

In conclusion
, I
truly
believe that
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doing
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exercise
is a better way to
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keep
up your
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health
this is
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because
it is the
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best
way to
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clear
out your mental depression and
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because
it
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gives
you
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best
fit that you can build yourself comparing to other choices.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Everyone wants to be as healthy as possible. Fortunately, in modern society there are many things that people can do to improve their physical condition. What do you think is the best way to stay healthy? -Get exercise on a regular basis-Eat healthy food e v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
449 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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