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Motor vehicle crashes are one of the leading causes of teen deaths. To prevent such road accidents, the government should ban people under 24 to drive motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is observed that, deaths of teenagers arising from road traffic accidents are on the increase, to solve this menace, some people are of the opinion that folks under the age of 24 should not be allowed to drive a vehicle. This essay completely agrees with this point of view because the under 24's are not wholly matured to operate a car and also, they do not yet have a sense of responsibility. First and Foremost, under the age of 24, they are not
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that, deaths of
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teenagers
arising from road traffic accidents are on the increase, to solve this menace,
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some
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people
are of the opinion that folks under the age of 24 should not be
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allowed
to drive a vehicle. This essay completely
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agrees
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point
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because
the under 24's are not wholly matured to operate a car and
also
, they do not
yet
have a sense of responsibility.

First
and Foremost, under the age of 24, they are not
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IELTS essay Motor vehicle crashes are one of the leading causes of teen deaths. To prevent such road accidents, the government should ban people under 24 to drive motorcycles.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
83 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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