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Most people spend a great deal of time at work; therefore job satisfaction is an important part of being happy in life. What elements are required for job satisfaction? It is possible for all workers to achieve job satisfaction. v.1

Most people spend a great deal of time at work; therefore job satisfaction is an important part of being happy in life. What elements are required for job satisfaction? It is possible for all workers to achieve job satisfaction. v. 1
From the dawn of the time, most people allotted greatly of their time working. Throughout the history, a lot of researchers tried to come up with a definition and ways to achieve job satisfaction. Being satisfied with one's job is an integral part for you to have a happy life and great physical and emotional well-being. This will be proven on how job satisfaction differs from one individual and another. It is greatly affected by one's definition of satisfaction and their expectation on the job. To begin with, nowadays people's lives greatly depend on their income and benefits from their job. Salary seems to be an essential element in considering their happiness and contentment to one's job. Another contributing element is the working environment. A healthy working environment consists of a good relationship between the employee and the employer, as well as their colleague, this has been an important role in attaining job satisfaction. In addition, without any doubt having a good time at work is one to take into consideration. To be more specific no one can be satisfied with their job if they are having an unhealthy relationship with their colleagues, this will definitely give them a lot of stress and will soon affect the person's job performance. Last but not the least, career growth opportunity is also one of the elements to be considered to attain a great job satisfaction that triggers the employee's happiness and making them realise their potentials. Apparently, there are so many contributing elements to attain job satisfaction. But it is really possible for one to be satisfied with their job? In my own point of view, I would definitely agree that one can be satisfied on their job depending on their definition of satisfaction and depending on their reasonable and attainable expectation on their work. In my case, if I have to dependent on my salary and benefits for my job satisfaction it will be certain that I'm unsatisfied with my current job. As no one will be satisfied with their job if that will be their basis, because a good financial compensation and an excellent benefit is just a prize for all your hard work. Furthermore, working long hours and having a low salary will be out of the picture if you will just learn how to love your work and enjoy what you are doing. To sum it up, although it is hard to be fully satisfied on one's job, it would be great if you will focus on the positive aspect of your work ad ignore the negative side of it, in order for you to achieve job satisfaction and happiness in life.
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. Throughout the history,
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researchers tried to
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come
up with a definition and ways to achieve
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job
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satisfaction
. Being
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satisfied
with one's
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job
is an integral part for you to have a happy life and great physical and emotional well-being. This will
be proven
on how
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job
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satisfaction
differs from one individual and another. It is
greatly
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affected
by one's definition of
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satisfaction
and their expectation on the job.

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with, nowadays
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people
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lives
greatly
depend on their income and benefits from their
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. Salary seems to be an essential
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element
in considering their happiness and contentment to one's
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. Another contributing
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element
is the
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working
environment. A healthy
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environment consists of a
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good
relationship between the employee and the employer,
as well
as their colleague, this has been an
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important
role in attaining
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job
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.
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good
time at
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work
is one to take into consideration. To be more specific no one can be
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satisfied
with their
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if they are having an unhealthy relationship with their colleagues, this will definitely give them
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and will
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affect the person's
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performance. Last
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not the least, career growth opportunity is
also
one of the
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to
be considered
to attain a great
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job
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satisfaction
that triggers the employee's happiness and making them
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realise
their potentials.

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, there are
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.
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? In my
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on their
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depending on their definition of
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and depending on their reasonable and attainable expectation on their
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. In my case, if I
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dependent on my salary and benefits for my
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it will be certain that I'm unsatisfied with my
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if that will be their basis,
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financial compensation and an excellent benefit is
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,
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long hours and having a low salary will be out of the picture if you will
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learn how to
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To sum it up, although it is
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, it would be great if you will focus on the
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side of it, in order for you to achieve
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and happiness in life.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Most people spend a great deal of time at work; therefore job satisfaction is an important part of being happy in life. What elements are required for job satisfaction? It is possible for all workers to achieve job satisfaction. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
444 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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