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Most people prefer ready to eat food than home-made food now. Do you think it has more advantages or more disadvantages? v.2

Most people prefer ready to eat food than home-made food now. Do you think it has more advantages or more disadvantages? v. 2
Nuclear families and new working culture have changed the way people cook food. Many individuals opt for convenience food these days rather than home-cooked food. In my opinion, there are more drawbacks for people in consuming ready to eat food compared to food cooked at home. Admittedly, there are some benefits of packaged food. Firstly, since it can be cooked easily, it saves a lot of time. In other words, all the pre-requisite of preparing food has been done and the person has to just cook the last part. For instance, ready to eat Punjabi curry can be made in ten to fifteen minutes compared to an hour required to prepare from scratch at home. Secondly, convenience food is helpful because it has the required taste which helps people to satisfy their hunger. Packaged food is prepared to keep in mind the taste of people and their choice, which give people an opportunity to consume tasty food rather than what they would have prepared; thus, ready to eat food is prefered by many people these days. Nevertheless, despite the benefits mentioned above, I believe that packaged food has more concerning drawbacks. One potential problem is that convenience food does not contain an adequate amount of carbohydrates, proteins, vitamins and necessary minerals. Unlike the fresh food prepared at home which is healthy, ready to eat food concentrates more on taste than necessities of various requisites for the human body. Another negative aspect is that ready-made food contains too many preservatives which are bad for human health. Because food has to be stored for a longer duration before finally being prepared, preservatives are added to keep it fresh and eatable which affects the human body. For example, according to the recent survey of a known magazine conducted in western India among the people aged between 27-35, 65% of people became obese and fell ill once in a month by consuming ready to eat food. Hence, consuming packaged food can have serious consequence to an individual' s health. In conclusion, due to the unavailability of necessary nutrients and harmful preservatives in convenience food, it can cause more issues to people than any minor advantages it might bring.
Nuclear families and new working culture have
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cook
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individuals opt for
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convenience
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food
these days
rather
than home-cooked
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food
. In my opinion, there are more drawbacks for
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people
in consuming
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ready
to
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eat
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food
compared to
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food
cooked at home.

Admittedly
, there are
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some
benefits of
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packaged
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food
.
Firstly
, since it can
be cooked
easily
, it saves
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a lot of
time.
In other words
, all the
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pre-requisite
of preparing
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food
has
been done
and the person
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has to
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just
cook the last part.
For instance
,
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ready
to
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eat
Punjabi curry can
be made
in ten to fifteen minutes compared to an hour required to prepare from scratch at home.
Secondly
,
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convenience
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food
is helpful
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because
it has the required taste which
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helps
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people
to satisfy their hunger.
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food
is
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prepared
to
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keep
in mind the taste of
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people
and their choice, which give
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people
an opportunity to consume tasty
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food
rather
than what they would have
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prepared
;
thus
,
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ready
to
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eat
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food
is
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prefered
by
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many
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people
these days.

Nevertheless
, despite the benefits mentioned above, I believe that
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packaged
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food
has more concerning drawbacks. One potential problem is that
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convenience
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food
does not contain an adequate amount of carbohydrates, proteins, vitamins and necessary minerals. Unlike the fresh
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food
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prepared
at home which is healthy,
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ready
to
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eat
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food
concentrates more on taste than necessities of various requisites for the human body. Another
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negative
aspect is that ready-made
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food
contains too
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many
preservatives which are
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bad
for human health.
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Because
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food
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has to
be stored
for a longer duration
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before
finally
being
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prepared
, preservatives are
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added
to
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keep
it fresh and eatable which affects the human body.
For example
, according to the recent survey of a known magazine conducted in western India among the
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people
aged between 27-35, 65% of
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people
became obese and fell ill once in a month by consuming
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ready
to
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eat
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food
.
Hence
, consuming
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packaged
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food
can have serious
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In conclusion
, due to the unavailability of necessary nutrients and harmful preservatives in
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convenience
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food
, it can cause more issues to
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people
than any minor advantages it might bring.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Most people prefer ready to eat food than home-made food now. Do you think it has more advantages or more disadvantages? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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