Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Most people do not care enough about environmental issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most people do not care enough about environmental issues. G72B
In the cutting edge era, environmental issues has been increased day by day. This is happened due of carelessness of human beings. I personally agreed with the said notion as this problem is mainly arise because of number of factories and cutting of trees, more transportation To commence with the view of agreement, there are plethora of environmental issues such as air pollution, water pollution, noise pollution and others. Firstly, number of factories badly effects our surroundings. To explain it, factories generate smoking while manufacturing products such as coal, petroleum, steel and others which creates bad effect on our environmental. For example, according to survey, in India, almost 40% people has died due to poor quality of air. Moreover, in the contemporary ear, people cutting numerous of trees to setup their business such as making homes and others on that land which leads to make repercussions effects on surrounding of animals as well as on society Further view of strength, transportation is prominent reason of environmental issue. To explicate it, nowadays, everyone has their own vehicle which generate a lots of air and noise pollution. It’s also main reason of accidents and makes bad impact on surrounding. Hospital near to city suffer from the issue of noise because some of the patient loose their life due of heart attack and more sounds. For instance, the famous news headlines explain that the death rate has increased by passing of years due of more vehicles accidents. Hence, it leads to creates hazards on environment. To conclude this, there are various reasons of surrounding issue such as some type of pollutions and accidents and others. This problems is arise because Individuals are perform their duties towards environment.
In the cutting edge era,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issues
has
been increased
day by day. This
is happened
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
due
of carelessness of human beings. I
personally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
with the said notion as this problem is
mainly
Consider using a past participle here: "arisen".
arise
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of number of factories and cutting of trees, more
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
transportation


To commence with the view of agreement, there are plethora of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issues
such as air
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
, water
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
, noise
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
and others
.

Firstly
, number of factories
badly
effects our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
surroundings
. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
it, factories generate smoking while manufacturing products such as coal, petroleum, steel
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
and others
which creates
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
effect on our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
.
For example
, according to survey, in India, almost 40%
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
died
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
due
to poor quality of air.
Moreover
, in the contemporary ear,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
cutting numerous of trees
The verb 'set up' is spelled as two words. The noun 'setup' is spelled as one.
to setup
their business such as making homes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
and others
on that land which leads to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
repercussions effects on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
surrounding
of animals
as well
as on society

Further
view of strength, transportation is prominent reason of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
. To explicate it, nowadays, everyone has their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
vehicle which generate
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "a lot" or simply "lots"?
a lots
of air and noise
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
. It’s
also
main reason of accidents and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
impact on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
surrounding
. Hospital near to city suffer from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
of noise
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
patient
Did you mean "lose" (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
loose
their life
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
due
of heart attack and more sounds.
For instance
, the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
news headlines
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
that the death rate has increased by passing of years
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
due
of more vehicles accidents.
Hence
, it leads to creates hazards on environment.

To conclude
this, there are various reasons of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
surrounding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
such as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
type of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollutions
and accidents
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
and others
.
Did you mean "these"?
This
problems
You should probably use: "are".
is
Consider using a past participle here: "arisen".
arise
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
Individuals are
Consider using a past participle here: "performed".
perform
their duties towards environment.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Most people do not care enough about environmental issues.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
284 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts