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Most people agree that money cannot be happiness. Why is happiness difficult to define? How can people achieve happiness?

Most people agree that money cannot be happiness. Why is happiness difficult to define? How can people achieve happiness? B27a
There is no direct relation between money and happiness. Happiness varies from person to person which makes it difficult to define happiness. However there are several ways by which happiness can be achieved. To start with, happiness is a subjective feeling. It is different for different people. It completely depends on an individual's choice and needs and that too keeps on changing with time. For an instance, if a chocolate is given to a child it can be his path towards his joy, but when the same child grows up the same chocolate might not mean the same to him. Secondly, few people find happiness in materialistic possession whereas few get it by just communicating or spending time with their family members or near and dear ones. To examplify, someone living in a foreign country earns heaps of money but is not able to spend time with family members or friends does not get joy of having a good company to share everything. Moreover, there are numerous ways by which happiness can be achieved. Starting with the accomplishment of goals. If desires are fulfilled in less time or as per the expectations it brings happiness in a person's life. Moreover, change in routine can also help a person to be joyous. For instance, celebrities who have a very happening life seems to be happy for the outer world but deep down they know what they actually feel. So to find happiness they like to do charity to help needy people and underprivileged children. To sum up, it can be said that being in the state of joy differs for everyone but if the needs and desires are satisfied it can help a person to achieve happiness.
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IELTS essay Most people agree that money cannot be happiness. Why is happiness difficult to define? How can people achieve happiness?

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  American English
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286 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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