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More regions are depleting from the water and moisture resulting in climate changes.

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More regions are depleting from the water and moisture resulting in climate changes. Scientists proposed to plant trees in a type of boxes, which persevere and collect water helping trees to survive. The article discusses the proposed solution is not functional, using several logics. On the contrary, the professor cites three chief reasons to oppose the points in the reading. First of all, the writer explains, the boxes are pricey. In addition, to eliminate desertification we need numerous boxes. In fact, this idea will not be financially practical. In contrast, the professor argues the devices supports the young trees, and after the trees grow enough the device could be utilized again for new young trees. Due to this fact, these boxes can be used for a lot of trees rather one tree, as a result, governments are able to save tremendous amount of the budget. Second, the reading suggests local people should incorporate with the project to maintain the newly planted trees. In fact, There is no motive to persuade people to participate in the projects. Conversely, the professor claims State authorities could give a quantity of the devices to the local people for growing vegetables, moreover, they can use branches of trees as firewoods. Sequently, these are appropriate motivations for local people. Finally, the writer believes, the capability of boxes for saving water is limited. Actually, these boxes are suitable for young and small trees. In addition, a wide range of deserts suffer from lack of shortage in precipitations; consequently, the idea will not work. Contrary, the lecturer declares the boxes are adequate to support young trees. They will grow and their roots will access to the under ground moisture, and after that they do not need the boxes. Furthermore, the idea performed in the Sahara desert, and the results were hopeful. To sum, the reading states three reasons to oppose the proposed solution to fight with desertification. However, the professor rejects the reasons in the passage using different examples and illustrations.
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changes
. Scientists proposed to plant
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trees
in a type of
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boxes
, which persevere and collect water helping
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trees
to survive.

The article discusses the proposed solution is not functional, using several logics.
On the contrary
, the
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professor
cites three chief reasons to oppose the points in the reading.

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First of all
, the writer
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explains
, the
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boxes
are pricey.
In addition
, to eliminate desertification we need numerous
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boxes
. In fact, this
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idea
will not be
financially
practical.
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In
contrast, the
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professor
argues the devices supports the
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young
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trees
, and after the
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trees
grow
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enough
the device could
be utilized
again for new
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young
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trees
. Due to this fact, these
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boxes
can be
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used
for
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a lot of
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trees
rather
one
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tree
,
as a result
,
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governments
are able to save tremendous amount of the budget.

Second, the reading suggests local
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people
should incorporate with the project to maintain the
newly
planted
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trees
. In fact, There is no motive to persuade
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people
to participate in the projects.
Conversely
, the
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professor
claims State authorities could give a quantity of the devices to the local
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people
for growing vegetables,
moreover
, they can
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use
branches of
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trees
as
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firewoods
.
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Sequently
, these are appropriate motivations for local
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people
.

Finally
, the writer believes, the capability of
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boxes
for saving water
is limited
. Actually, these
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boxes
are suitable for
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young
and
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small
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trees
.
In addition
, a wide range of deserts suffer from lack of shortage in precipitations;
consequently
, the
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idea
will not work. Contrary, the lecturer declares the
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boxes
are adequate to support
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young
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trees
. They will grow and their roots will access to the under ground moisture, and after that they do not need the
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boxes
.
Furthermore
, the
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idea
performed in the Sahara desert, and the results were hopeful.

To sum, the reading states three reasons to oppose the proposed solution to fight with desertification.
However
, the
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professor
rejects the reasons in the passage using
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different
examples and illustrations.
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IELTS essay More regions are depleting from the water and moisture resulting in climate changes.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
333 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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