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More ond more peopre ore using cornputers ond olhe-r. eleclronic deyices lo occess informotion. So. printing of books, mogozines ond newspopers should nol be done. Do you ogtee or disogree with this?

More ond more peopre ore using cornputers ond olhe-r. eleclronic deyices lo occess informotion. So. printing of books, mogozines ond newspopers should nol be done. Do you ogtee or disogree with this? ABape
Nowadays, due to technological enhancement, people are able to receive as well as send data very easily. People are using computers and other electronic gadgets to access information so books, magazines and newspapers should not be done. The essay discusses the statement. To begin with, the pros of using electronic devices. Firstly, it not only saves the time of the people but also save the effort and the money of the people. Apart from this, people can also save useful instructions into the system in various formats such as in image, audio, video, text and numerous formats. Moreover, from computers as well as other electronic gadgets, people can access any information at any time and anywhere. People does not have to wait a long time to get information which are able into the books, newspapers as well as magazines because all types of data are able on the internet. On the flip side, some cons of information from electronic devices. Firstly, it does not only has bad impact on the health of the person but also has changing in the behaviour of the person in the fact of using electronic equipment. Apart from this, people have stress to read some text data because of extremely poor highlighted fonts. Into the newspapers, books or magazines, a number of useful instructions are available in extremely bold fonts which, people can read easily. To put it in a nutshell, I totally agree with the people who think that instructions from electronic equipment are available so hard copies are not needed because it is excellent for people to access important information from electronic gadgets.
Nowadays, due to technological enhancement,
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people
are able to receive
as well
as
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send
data
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very
easily
.
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People
are using computers and other
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electronic
gadgets to access
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information
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so
books, magazines and newspapers should not
be done
. The essay discusses the statement.

To
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begin
with, the pros of using
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electronic
devices.
Firstly
, it not
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only
saves the time of the
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people
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but
also
save the effort and the money of the
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people
. Apart from this,
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people
can
also
save useful instructions into the system in various formats such as in image, audio, video, text and numerous formats.
Moreover
, from computers
as well
as other
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electronic
gadgets,
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people
can access any
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information
at any time and anywhere.
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People
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
does
not
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have to
wait a long time to
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get
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information
which are able into the books, newspapers
as well
as magazines
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because
all types of data are able on the internet.

On the flip side,
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some
cons of
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information
from
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electronic
devices.
Firstly
, it does not
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only
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has
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bad
impact on the health of the person
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but
also
has changing in the
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behaviour
of the person in the fact of using
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electronic
equipment. Apart from this,
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people
have
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stress
to read
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some
text data
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because
of
extremely
poor highlighted fonts. Into the newspapers, books or magazines, a number of useful instructions are available in
extremely
bold fonts which,
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people
can read
easily
.

To put it in a nutshell, I
totally
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agree
with the
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people
who
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think
that instructions from
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electronic
equipment are available
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so
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hard
copies are not needed
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because
it is excellent for
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people
to access
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important
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information
from
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electronic
gadgets.
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IELTS essay More ond more peopre ore using cornputers ond olhe-r. eleclronic deyices lo occess informotion. So. printing of books, mogozines ond newspopers should nol be done. Do you ogtee or disogree with this?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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