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More and more young people are using drugs and alcohol and as a result, breaking the law. What are the causes of this problem? What are some possible solutions?

More and more young people are using drugs and alcohol and as a result, breaking the law. What are the causes of this problem? What are some possible solutions? 5OEQ
There has been a recent spike in the younger generation using illegal substances and drinking alcohol with the evidence showing leads to them committing crimes. This essay will discuss how children have nothing to do on the weekend’s results in this antisocial behaviour and how building and promoting sports centres can reduce the problem. When children of a young age do not have anything planned for the weekend they can often been seen loitering on the streets. This boredom leads to them experimenting with alcohol or drugs as they can often meet ___. As they do not know any better and there is a lot of peer pressure, children can end up drinking alcohol and doing drugs. Both of these actions inhibit their decision making which can result in them committing criminal offences. For example, when a child is being led astray and cannot form their own judgement due to being under the influence they could end up stealing or any other crime. In an attempt to reduce this kind of behaviour, the local councils should promote the sports centres for kids to go to on Friday and Saturday night as these are the most common times crimes are committed. By creating a group atmosphere and keeping kids off of the street, there is no incentive for them to return. For example, in London there are a lot of Non-Profit Organisations which work to keep kids off the street by developing football teams. The feedback from the children is that they were on the wrong path but sports has kept them on the right one. In conclusion, young naïve kids can easily bed led astray and when under the influence can commit criminal offences. However this can be corrected if the council look to keep kids off of the street during the weekends and participate in sporting events.
There has been a recent spike in the younger generation using illegal substances and drinking alcohol with the evidence showing leads to them committing crimes. This essay will discuss how
children
have nothing to do on the weekend’s results in this antisocial
behaviour
and how building and promoting sports
centres
can
reduce
the problem.

When
children
of a young age do not have anything planned for the weekend they can
often
been
seen
loitering on the
streets
. This boredom leads to them experimenting with alcohol or drugs as they can
often
meet
___. As they do not know any better and there is
a lot of peer
pressure,
children
can
end
up drinking alcohol and doing drugs. Both of these actions inhibit their
decision making
which can result in them committing criminal
offences
.
For example
, when a child is
being led
astray and cannot form their
own
judgement due to being under the influence they could
end
up stealing or any other crime.

In an attempt to
reduce
this kind of
behaviour
, the local councils should promote the sports
centres
for
kids
to go to on Friday and Saturday night as these are the most common times crimes
are committed
. By creating a group atmosphere and keeping
kids
off of the
street
, there is no incentive for them to return.
For example
, in London there are
a lot of
Non-Profit
Organisations
which work to
keep
kids
off the
street
by developing football teams. The feedback from the
children
is that they were on the
wrong
path
but
sports has
kept
them on the right one.

In conclusion
, young naïve
kids
can
easily
bed led astray and when under the influence can commit criminal
offences
.
However
this can
be corrected
if the council look to
keep
kids
off of the
street
during the weekends and participate in sporting
events
.
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IELTS essay More and more young people are using drugs and alcohol and as a result, breaking the law. What are the causes of this problem? What are some possible solutions?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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