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More and more students choose to go to another country for higher education. Do you think the benefits outweigh the problems.

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It has been observed that more and more number of students, who prefer to study abroad for their graduation and post graduation. In my opinion, the benefits are such a choice surpasses their problems. My inclination is elaborated further. Considering the advantages of abroad study, most importantly, students want to study in well-known reputable universities, which offers various courses. Also, they educate from talented professors and help students to do research and discoveries in particular era of the education. Moreover, students should adopt a new culture and tradition of foreign countries. It also, helps to improve the knowledge and imagination towards the world. Another benefit is that, having a graduation from foreign universities open the door for better job opportunities in the future. As well as, it leads a bright professional career. In addition, students become independent. They take a number of responsibilities. For instance, they do cooking, ironing their cloths, pay a electricity bills regularly by themselves. However, there are also some problems for abroad education. The language barrier can be aa worst problem for many students. Because of that it is difficult for them to live and understand the lectures in class rooms. Besides this, many universities demand a higher amount of fees and sometimes it is a challenging situation for many parents. In conclusion, there are various benefits for students, who choose to study abroad for making their future bright. But there are also some negligible problems for students and parents also.
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been observed
that more and more number of
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students
, who prefer to
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study
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abroad
for their graduation and post graduation. In my opinion, the benefits are such a choice surpasses their
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problems
. My inclination
is elaborated
further
.

Considering the advantages of
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abroad
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study
, most
importantly
,
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students
want to
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study
in well-known reputable universities, which offers various courses.
Also
, they educate from talented professors and
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help
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students
to do research and discoveries
in particular
era of the education.
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,
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students
should adopt a new culture and tradition of foreign countries. It
also
,
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helps
to
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improve
the knowledge and imagination towards the world.

Another benefit is that, having a graduation from foreign universities open the door for better job opportunities in the future.
As well
as, it leads a bright professional career.
In addition
,
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students
become independent. They take a number of responsibilities.
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, they
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do cooking
, ironing their cloths, pay
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electricity bills
regularly
by themselves.

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, there are
also
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problems
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education. The language barrier can be
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of that it is difficult for them to
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live
and understand the lectures in
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universities demand a higher amount of fees and
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it is a challenging situation for
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parents.

In conclusion
, there are various benefits for
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students
, who choose to
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study
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abroad
for making their future bright.
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there are
also
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negligible
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students
and parents
also
.
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IELTS essay More and more students choose to go to another country for higher education. Do you think the benefits outweigh the problems.

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