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More and more people use cell phones

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In modern life, most people are advantaging mobile phones and the internet to communicate is being developed, however people are abolish the power of communicate face to face around the world. In this case, I personally support this situation due to some relevant reasons. This essay will make an affort to explain some related and consequences of the circumstances. On the one hand, when people use cell phones and computers, their face to face communication skills can be losen, because of some main reasons. Firstly, when they often use the technologies all day and they do not have time for communicate face to face with friends and relatives. Then they spend most of their time own entertainment routines. As a result, they rarely talk with friends or relatives and time to time they may lose their ability to effectively communicate in face to face way. Secondly, many people spend more time for make a online friend. Therefore, they create own chanels which are on telegram, instagram and youtobe. While they are gaining followers to chanel, make a online friend, so that they begin to feel lack of communication ability for face to face. On the other hand, online communication is helped to perevent from spread of serious illness, as now covid-19 is spreading now around earth and we must not go out home. This situation, online communication is very well, in spite of many people do not use this type of relationship and be innfected by face to face. Taking everything into account, it can be concluded that cell phones may lead to losing of communication skills when people have face to face meeting. However, online relation ship prevent from spread disease
In modern life, most
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people
are advantaging mobile phones and the internet to
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communicate
is
being developed
,
however
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people
are abolish the power of
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communicate
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face
to
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face
around the world.
In this case
,
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I


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personally
support this situation due to
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some
relevant reasons. This essay will
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make
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affort
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explain
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some
related and consequences of the circumstances.

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people
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use
cell phones and computers, their
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face
to
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face
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communication
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skills
can be
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losen
,
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because
of
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some
main reasons.
Firstly
, when they
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often
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use
the technologies all
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day and
they do not have
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time
for
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communicate
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face
to
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face
with
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friends
and relatives.

Then they spend most of their
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time
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own
entertainment routines.
As a result
, they rarely talk with
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friends
or relatives and
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time
to
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time
they may lose their ability to
effectively
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communicate
in
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face
to
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face
way.
Secondly
,
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many
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people
spend more
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time
for
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make
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a
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online
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friend
.
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, they create
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own
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chanels
which are on telegram,
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instagram
and
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youtobe
. While they are gaining followers to
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chanel
,
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make
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a
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online
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friend
,
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so
that they
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begin
to feel lack of
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communication
ability for
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face
to face.

On the other hand
,
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online
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communication
is
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helped
to
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perevent
from spread of serious illness, as
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now
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covid-19
is spreading
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now
around
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earth and
we
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must
not go out home. This situation,
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online
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communication
is
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very
well,
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in spite of
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many
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people
do not
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use
this type of relationship and be
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innfected
by
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face
to face.

Taking everything into account, it can
be concluded
that cell phones may lead to losing of
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communication
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skills
when
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people
have
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face
to
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face
meeting.
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,
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online
relation ship
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prevent
from spread disease
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IELTS essay More and more people use cell phones

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
281 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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