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More and more people today are moving from the countryside. Why is this happening? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

In recent times, a lot of people abandon their village. This essay will explore the reason of this situation and determine different effects to development. There will be several reasons of moving from the countryside. People living away from the city leave their place for education and job. For instance, after school accessing the university student move to the big city. People who want to get job with lucrative salary also desert village for finding new work. In addition, we can note the role of living condition in that case, too. It is true that, majority of countryside people live under difficult conditions and therefore they leave their place hoping to live a good life. But, to my mind, it has negative consequences for improvement. Firstly, there are made urban problems in cities with the increase of people. The pollution is also one of the problems created by the moving people. For example, the city and air are polluted with household waste due to the living a lot of people in one place. Despite these, more people it is much noise and much traffic. Because, students and workers mostly use public transport. The moving people is not only negative development for cities, it has negative effect also for countrysides. We can explain it this way: with the moving there will not stay many people in the countryside and therefore, these places will not improve and agriculture is also plummet. In conclusion, I would like to point out once again, for some reasons as pollution, traffic and undevelompent of villages moving from the countryside is a negative development.
In recent times,
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a lot of
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people
abandon their village. This essay will explore the reason of this situation and determine
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different
effects to development.

There will be several reasons of
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moving
from the
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countryside
.
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People
living away from the city
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leave
their
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place
for education and job.
For instance
, after school accessing the university student
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move
to the
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big
city.
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People
who want to
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get
job with lucrative salary
also
desert village for finding new work.
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, we can note the role of living condition
in that case
, too. It is true that, majority of
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countryside
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people
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live
under difficult conditions and
therefore
they
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place
hoping to
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live
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good
life.

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But
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negative
consequences for improvement.
Firstly
, there
are made
urban problems in
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cities
with the increase of
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people
. The pollution is
also
one of the problems created by the
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moving
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people
.
For example
, the city and air
are polluted
with household waste due to the living
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a lot of
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people
in one
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. Despite these, more
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people
it is much noise and much traffic.
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, students and workers
mostly
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use
public transport. The
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moving
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people
is not
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only
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negative
development for
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cities
, it has
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negative
effect
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for
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countrysides
. We can
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explain
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moving
there will not stay
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many
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in the
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and
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, these
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places
will not
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and agriculture is
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In conclusion
, I would like to point out once again, for
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reasons as pollution, traffic and
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undevelompent
of villages
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from the
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negative
development.
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IELTS essay More and more people today are moving from the countryside. Why is this happening? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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