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More and more people think there is no need for printed newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

More and more people think there is no need for printed newspapers. v. 1
Imported foods are usually imported because of the demands of the people living in the country importing the food. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the merits and demerits of allowing only local food produced by the farmer to be consumed to protect the environment and an economy of a country. Foremost, advantage of allowing eatable items from other countries is to give a freedom of choices to the local people. There are various items in an eatable category and people have their own taste so allowing this sort of arrangement will assist people to choose freely what to eat and vice versa. For example, In first world countries, their people seem to be happy because of their policy which allow foods to import regardless of their effects on the environment and an economy. On the other hand, The disadvantage of allowing eatable items from another part of the world encourage people not to give a priority to the local foods resulting loss in usage of the local foods, increase in an environmental pollution and crises in the economy. After having so many choices of the food items, a person can easily ignore the local food item because they have been consuming it since their childhood. For example, In third world countries when country focuses to bring the food items from their allies their people found to be focusing on newly brought foods instead of the local foods. To sum up, Sometimes it is a good choice to allow the food products from other countries and some time won't. It is entirely depends on the statistics of the country who is willing to import the food items.
Imported
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foods
are
usually
imported
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because
of the demands of the
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people
living in the
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country
importing the
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food
. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the merits and demerits of
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allowing
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only
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local
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food
produced by the farmer to
be consumed
to protect the environment and an economy of a country.

Foremost, advantage of
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allowing
eatable
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items
from other
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countries
is to give
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a freedom
of choices to the
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local
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people
. There are various
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items
in an eatable category and
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people
have their
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own
taste
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so
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allowing
this sort of arrangement will assist
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people
to choose
freely
what to eat and vice versa.
For example
, In
first
world
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countries
, their
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people
seem to be happy
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because
of their policy which
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allow
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foods
to import regardless of their effects on the environment and an economy.

On the other hand
, The disadvantage of
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allowing
eatable
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items
from another part of the world encourage
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people
not to give a priority to the
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local
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foods
resulting loss in usage of the
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local
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foods
, increase in an environmental pollution and crises in the economy. After having
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so
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many
choices of the
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food
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items
, a person can
easily
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ignore
the
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local
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food
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item
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because
they have been consuming it since their childhood.
For example
, In third world
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countries
when
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country
focuses to bring the
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food
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items
from their allies their
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people
found to be focusing on
newly
brought
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foods
instead
of the
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local
foods.

To sum up,
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Sometimes
it is a
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good
choice to
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allow
the
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food
products from other
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countries
and
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some
time won't. It is
entirely
depends on the statistics of the
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country
who is willing to import the
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food
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items
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more people think there is no need for printed newspapers. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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