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More and more people claim that modern work patterns are a source of stress. What do you think are the causes of this? Can you suggest some possible solutions?

More and more people claim that modern work patterns are a source of stress. What do you think are the causes of this? Can you suggest some possible solutions? Nowadays a lot of people state that work patterns cause stress. It is apparent that a variety of reasons could lead to stress at the workplace but I would like to highlight two primary ones. Firstly, conditions could be not suitable for comfort work. Secondly, people cannot deal with huge amount of work. The possible solutions depend on employers who should provide everything needed for comfort being at work and plan tasks more carefully. A number of employees complain of horrible work conditions hindering them to work productively. By this I mean that outdated office facilities and insufficient space for placing impact on productivity and mood of workers. For example, research on the satisfaction of employees provided by HR at edna company revealed that people’s demands about appliances in the office are high. Moreover, workers likely could have chosen another organisation if the facilities were poor. To combat this issue organisations should introduce design in accordance with comfort and provide modern appliances. The next possible source of stress is linked with overwhelming workload. It means that top management sets KPI that workers cannot achieve and the volume of tasks is extremely high. For instance, it is a well-known fact that in Russia and especially in Japan people often work extra hours and sometimes without weekends or vacations. To cope with this issue that lead to severe issues in people’s mental health planning work more carefully and thoughtfully is needed. In other words managers should distribute work among a team evenly and not to give a huge number of tasks for a short period. To exemplify, in Sweden and Germany it is strictly forbidden to work when a workday is over, all staff follows this rule, and managers think beforehand how to plan job tasks. In conclusion, two big problems causing stress at work are inconvenient conditions at the workplace and extremely high demands of efficiency and productivity from employees. Investment in office facilities as much as reducing tasks and work-life balance respect could mitigate stress.
More and more
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claim that modern
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patterns are a source of
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. What do you
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are the causes of this? Can you suggest
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possible solutions?

Nowadays
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a lot of
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people
state that
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work
patterns cause
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stress
. It is apparent that a variety of reasons could lead to
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stress
at the workplace
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I would like to highlight two primary ones.
Firstly
, conditions could be not suitable for comfort
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work
.
Secondly
,
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people
cannot deal with huge amount of
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work
. The possible solutions depend on employers who should provide everything needed for comfort being at
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work
and plan
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tasks
more
carefully
.

A number of employees complain of horrible
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work
conditions hindering them to
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work
productively
. By this I mean that outdated office facilities and insufficient space for placing impact on productivity and mood of workers.
For example
, research on the satisfaction of employees provided by HR at edna
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company
revealed that
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people’s
demands about appliances in the office are high.
Moreover
, workers likely could have chosen another organisation if the facilities were poor. To combat this issue organisations should introduce design in accordance with comfort and provide modern appliances.

The
next
possible source of
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stress
is linked
with overwhelming workload. It means that top management sets KPI that workers cannot achieve and the volume of
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tasks
is
extremely
high.
For instance
,
it is a well-known fact that
in Russia and
especially
in Japan
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people
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often
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work
extra hours and
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sometimes
without weekends or vacations. To cope with this issue that lead to severe issues in
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people’s
mental health planning
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work
more
carefully
and
thoughtfully
is needed
.
In other words
managers should distribute
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work
among a team
evenly
and not to give a huge number of
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tasks
for a short period. To exemplify, in Sweden and Germany it is
strictly
forbidden to
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work
when a workday is over, all staff follows this
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rule
, and managers
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think
beforehand how to plan job tasks.

In conclusion
, two
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big
problems causing
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stress
at
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work
are inconvenient conditions at the workplace and
extremely
high demands of efficiency and productivity from employees. Investment in office facilities as much as reducing
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tasks
and work-life balance respect could mitigate
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stress
.
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IELTS essay More and more people claim that modern work patterns are a source of stress. What do you think are the causes of this? Can you suggest some possible solutions?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
364 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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