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More and more people are becoming overweight in developed countries. What are the causes? What solution do you Suggest to control it?

More and more people are becoming overweight in developed countries. What are the causes? What solution do you Suggest to control it? 0Mr39
In this modern-world, Obesity is a serious problem in most of the countries due to lack of regular physical exercise and overeating. Most of the people living in developed countries are victims of this obesity. There are various reasons that cause overweight, However by using varieties of methods this can be overtaken. In the subsequent subsection, this essay will discuss causes of overweight and marks a solution to overcome. Lack of proper appetite is one of the major cause for the obesity. A proper diet that contains a good amount of fiber, vitamins, proteins and by avoiding saturated fats and trans fats which can make a diet completely healthy. As per the recent survey usage of pescatarian diet is rated in a very low percentage. In addition to it lack of physical excise stays may become a drawback to make a person healthy. For instance, most people don't find time to be fit due to work pressure and laziness. The problem of obesity can be overtaken by maintaining a proper appetite with vegetarian food and fish but not other forms of meat. Many people like to have junk food which contains artificial fats that can help to maintain a proper appetite. To reduce the problem of being overweight, physical exercise is the most helpful task. There are many ways to maintain your body from over weight cycling, running, yoga and many more tasks to make you fit. The WHO recognizes that not only most of the health related problems are overcome by the following proper appetite and regular activities but also developed countries are becoming victims for high rates of obesity issues. In nut-shell, The citizens of economically emergent nations are becoming prey to problems of obesity. This can be overcome by maintaining a good appetite by avoiding different fats and proper exercise.
In this modern-world, Obesity is a serious
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problem
in most of the countries due to lack of regular physical exercise and overeating. Most of the
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people
living in
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developed countries
are victims of this obesity. There are various reasons that cause overweight,
However
by using varieties of methods this can
be overtaken
. In the subsequent subsection, this essay will discuss causes of overweight and marks a solution to overcome.

Lack of
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proper
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appetite
is one of the major cause for the obesity. A
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proper
diet that contains a
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good
amount of fiber, vitamins, proteins and by avoiding saturated
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fats
and trans
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fats
which can
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make
a diet completely healthy.
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diet
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low percentage.
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of physical excise stays may become a drawback to
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make
a person healthy.
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people
don't find time to
be fit
due to work pressure and laziness.

The
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problem
of obesity can
be overtaken
by maintaining a
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proper
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appetite
with vegetarian food and fish
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but
not other forms of meat.
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Many
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people
like to have junk food which contains artificial
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fats
that can
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help
to maintain a
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proper
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appetite
. To
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reduce
the
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problem
of being overweight, physical exercise is the most helpful task. There are
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many
ways to maintain your body from over weight cycling, running, yoga and
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many
more tasks to
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make
you fit. The WHO recognizes that not
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only
most of the health related
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problems
are overcome
by the following
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proper
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appetite
and regular activities
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but
also
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developed countries
are becoming victims for high rates of obesity issues.

In nut-shell, The citizens of
economically
emergent nations are becoming prey to
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problems
of obesity. This can
be overcome
by maintaining a
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good
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appetite
by avoiding
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different
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fats
and
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proper
exercise.
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IELTS essay More and more people are becoming overweight in developed countries. What are the causes? What solution do you Suggest to control it?

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