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More and more children from wealthy countries are doing unpaid work in poor countries, such as teaching, building houses etcetera. Why are they doig this? Who gets more benefits, the community or the young people?

More and more children from wealthy countries are doing unpaid work in poor countries, such as teaching, building houses etcetera. Why are they doig this? Who gets more benefits, the community or the young people? p1X9m
Nowadays, the trend of volunteer tourism is more popular for different purposes. It is noticable that most of the students come from the developed nations. There are many reasons are accountable for same. I believe that this thing is advantageous for both underprivileged people and young aspirants. In this essay I shall discuss the reasons as well as the benefits from this phenoneman. To begin with, there are several social media platforms are available which may makes people aware about the events from all over the world. So many youngster from rich countries get influence from it and inspire to help needy people in the world. For example, recent scenario of Afghanistan got viral on various social media therefore many countries try to help those people such as America. Secondly, In many countries there is a mandatory project on social work in their educational curriculum thus many students have to go in different nations and have to report for their project. There are some benefits for volunteers. Those aspirants can get some different as well as practical knowledge about the infrastructure of the country apart from the book data and it is also help to improve their work experience. After obtaining various types of knowledge they may get better job opportunities in their country. Furthermore, Children can get chance to explore the world and able to take information about the different traditions and cultures in their earlier age. Societies also have some advantages of the same. They have chance to learn different culture and habits such as food habit and way of working. Moreover, it is too productive for developing country's adults because they may get knowledge about new technologies which are using in developed countries along with that new innovative thing also there which may help a lot to grow children imagination skill. In conclusion, It is necessary for some students to travel in other nation however, It still very useful for both community and visitors.
Nowadays, the trend of volunteer tourism is more popular for
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different
purposes. It is
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noticable
that most of the students
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come
from the developed nations. There are
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many
reasons are accountable for same. I believe that this thing is advantageous for both underprivileged
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people
and young aspirants. In this essay I shall discuss the reasons
as well
as the benefits from this
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phenoneman
.

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begin
with, there are several social media platforms are available which may
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makes
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people
aware about the
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events
from all over the world.
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So
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many youngster
from rich
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countries
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get
influence from it and inspire to
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help
needy
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people
in the world.
For example
, recent scenario of Afghanistan
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got
viral on various social media
therefore
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many
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countries
try to
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help
those
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people
such as America.
Secondly
, In
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many
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countries
there is a mandatory project on social work in their educational curriculum
thus
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many
students
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have to
go in
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different
nations and
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have to
report for their project.

There are
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some
benefits for volunteers. Those aspirants can
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get
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some
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different
as well
as practical knowledge about the infrastructure of the
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country
apart from the book data and it is
also
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help
to
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improve
their work experience.
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After
obtaining various types of knowledge they may
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get
better job opportunities in their
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country
.
Furthermore
, Children can
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get
chance to explore the world and able to take information about the
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different
traditions and cultures in their earlier age.

Societies
also
have
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some
advantages of the same. They have chance to learn
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different
culture and habits such as food habit and way of working.
Moreover
, it is too productive for
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developing country
's adults
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because
they may
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get
knowledge about new technologies which are using in developed
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countries
along with that new innovative thing
also
there which may
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help
a lot to grow children imagination
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skill
.

In conclusion
, It is necessary for
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some
students to travel in other nation
however
, It
still
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very
useful for both community and visitors.
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IELTS essay More and more children from wealthy countries are doing unpaid work in poor countries, such as teaching, building houses etcetera. Why are they doig this? Who gets more benefits, the community or the young people?

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  American English
5 paragraphs
327 words
6.0
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