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Mony peopre nowodctys do nol feel sofe either when they ore alhome or go out. Whol ore lhe reosons ond whol con be done lo solyethis problem?

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There is no doubt that an increasing number of people feel unsafe, not only when they go out somewhere, but also when they are at home. There are several factors, which have lead to this increasing fear. ln this essay, I will look into the causes of this and suggest some solutions. The reasons why people are afraid of going out of their homes are very obvious. The crimes committed on the streets, are on a rise. The road mishaps have risen to a proportion, more than ever before and continue to increase everyday. Some people are afraid to go out because of the fear of natural calamities and also, sometimes due to health related disorders, which might be caused due to the increase in pollution. The reports of bombings and terrorattacks have become everyday news. As a result, people feel afraid of stepping out of their homes. At the same time, people are also becoming increasingly scared within their homes. The main reason for this is the escalation in the crimes being committed at homes, like murders, robberies, etc. ln a recent news article, it has been surveyed that there have been more crimes committed by domestic help at people's homes, than the crimes being committed on the streets. This has led to people feeling vulnerable, at home and when they are out on the streets. There are certain steps, which can be taken, by the government and individuals, to make people more safe and protected. The increasing unemployment is the main reason of these crimes. lf the youth of a country are provided vocational training and good job opportunities, they would not fall on the path of crime. Another important measure, which needs to be taken by the Sovernment, is to employ more security measures, like cameras, more police patrolling, and more security in public transport and public areas. This needs to be done in the residential and commercial areas, both, so that it deters the criminals and instills a sense of security in the public. For instance, in Bengaluru, Sovernment has now made it compulsory for all showrooms and shops to install security cameras. There are also random checks made by the government officials to ensure that the security standards are met in all commercial areas- To add to it, stricter punishments for the offenders will act as a major deterrent for the criminals. This will greatly reduce the incidents of crimes on the streets and at home. Another important measure is the use of technology in the security systems installed at homes. People can install advanced alarm systems and security cameras in their homes, to avoid any unwanted incidents of crime. This also helps greatly in the reduction of domestic crimes. PI. AN FOTLOWED: lntro: ParoT: Why people ore not sofe when they ore out of their homes Poro 2: Why they ore not sofe within their homes Poro 3: Solutions Paro 4: Solutions Conclusion makkarlELTS lwww. makkarlELTS. com To sum it up, people's fear and insecurity is justified, with the increasing reports of crime reported by the media. However, this situation can be mitigated by taking some measures, like tackling the unemployment problem, tiShtened security measures, stricter punishments and the use of advanced technology in households and
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when they are at home. There are several factors, which have lead to this
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the causes of this and suggest
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obvious. The
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streets, are on a rise.
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road mishaps have risen to a proportion, more than ever
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and continue to increase

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health related disorders, which might
be caused
due to the increase in pollution. The reports of bombings and
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terrorattacks
have become everyday news.
As a result
,
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people
feel afraid of stepping out of their homes.

At the same time,
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people
are
also
becoming
increasingly
scared within their
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homes
. The main reason for this is the

escalation in the
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being committed
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a recent news article, it has
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crimes
committed by domestic
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help
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, than the
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being committed
on the streets. This has led to
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people
feeling vulnerable, at home and when they are out on the streets.

There are certain steps, which can
be taken
, by the
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government
and individuals, to
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make
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people
more safe and

protected. The
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increasing
unemployment is the main reason of these
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crimes
.
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the youth of a country
are provided


vocational training and
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good
job opportunities, they would not fall on the path of
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crime
. Another
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important
measure,

which needs to
be taken
by the
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, is to employ more
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security
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measures
, like cameras, more police

patrolling, and more
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security
in public transport and public areas. This needs to
be done
in the residential and

commercial areas, both,
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so
that it deters the criminals and instills a sense of
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in the public.
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Bengaluru,
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has
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made it compulsory for all showrooms and shops to install
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cameras. There

are
also
random
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checks
made by the
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government
officials to ensure that the
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standards
are met
in all

commercial areas-

To
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add
to it, stricter punishments for the offenders will act as a major deterrent for the criminals. This will
greatly


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reduce
the incidents of
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crimes
on the streets and at home. Another
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important
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measure
is the
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of technology in

the
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security
systems installed at
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homes
.
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People
can install advanced alarm systems and
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security
cameras in their

homes, to avoid any unwanted incidents of
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crime
. This
also
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helps
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PI. AN
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: Why
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To sum it up,
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's fear and insecurity
is justified
, with the
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increasing
reports of
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crime
reported by the media.

However
, this situation can
be mitigated
by taking
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some
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measures
, like tackling the unemployment problem,

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, stricter punishments and the
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of advanced technology in households and
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IELTS essay Mony peopre nowodctys do nol feel sofe either when they ore alhome or go out. Whol ore lhe reosons ond whol con be done lo solyethis problem?

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